Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
These days, few individuals opine that advertisement is very powerful for promoting peoples to buy something ;However, others believe that it's just a waste of time and so common that no one is interested to watch them.Prior to my stands, both the viewpoints will be discussed in the further paragraphs with valid reasons and appropriate examples.
Discussing the former view, supporters believe that Advertisement is the best way by which the specific product is reached to there target customers because today's generation only believe in the things that they see and are highly rated by the influencers which are using that specific product,For instance if any highly profiled actress is advertising for any skin care product like face wash then it might get possible that teenagers or adults will buy it for their daily use.
However, there are the individuals who thinks it's just the waste of time because nowadays humans do not have patience level and when they get disturb while watching some kinds of series or movies in middle of interval or something like that so they get hyper and do not think that promoting products by long advertisement is a good business technique.
To conclude, it can be said that teenagers and adults get influenced by the product they see by there own eyes and also sometimes it disturbs them while having there relaxing time while watching movies or series so, there are both advantages and drawbacks of promoting products through advertisement .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views, but the development is limited. The word count is 246, which is below the 250-word minimum, resulting in a penalty. The arguments are somewhat superficial; for example, the explanation of why people ignore ads is limited to the idea of 'patience levels' and 'disturbances'. Furthermore, while you mention your own opinion in the introduction, it is not clearly maintained or developed in the conclusion, which merely summarizes the two sides rather than providing a definitive stance. To improve, ensure you fully explore the implications of each viewpoint and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for more depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Phrases like 'Prior to my stands' are non-standard and confusing. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or incorrectly placed, such as the semicolon usage in the introduction. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical development of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and occasionally inaccurate. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'promoting peoples' instead of 'persuading people' and 'reached to there target' instead of 'reaches its target'. The use of 'opine' is slightly unnatural in this context. You rely on simple, repetitive language, which limits your ability to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more academic vocabulary, such as 'consumer behavior' or 'ubiquitous' instead of 'so common'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('individuals who thinks'), incorrect pronoun usage ('there' instead of 'their'), and punctuation errors. Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when you attempt complex constructions. For example, 'it might get possible that teenagers or adults will buy it' is awkward and grammatically incorrect. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for common errors like homophones (there/their) and basic verb forms.
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