Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.
firsts we will discuss about which says that advertising is extremely successful . my opinon is this that this is true because adds are good because they knowlgde us for the new things that was in market . it was very helpful for sellers that run the adds to make the sell grow . its is very easy way for people to place a order when they was in home .
secondly we will discuss about which says advertising common . mostly people do not pay attention to add because people do a scam for using it . they will trap aa people to show a good things but when the delivery arrived but product is very bad . mostly seo make website and they want to came his website at the top of the google page so they make a different beautiful add that attract people when peoples open it there is nothing in this link .
every body has its own opinon but my is this . one more thing when you click the add some information go to the hacker that make a trap for you when you click it your personal information was gone to it . they black mail you for money . they internet first check all the adds that there is no scammer if scammer then they do not approved it to run the add . otherwise approved
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is limited and lacks depth. While you state your opinion, the supporting arguments are repetitive and rely on anecdotal examples rather than a balanced discussion of the topic. The explanation regarding why people ignore advertisements is somewhat tangential, focusing heavily on online scams and cybersecurity rather than the psychological aspect of 'ad blindness' or the ubiquity of marketing. To improve, ensure that each paragraph directly addresses the prompt's core concepts and provides clear, logical reasoning that supports your stated position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as 'firsts we will discuss' and 'secondly we will discuss'. These phrases are repetitive and do not effectively link ideas. Furthermore, the transition between the two viewpoints is abrupt, and the concluding paragraph introduces new, unrelated information about cybersecurity instead of summarizing the main points. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'knowlgde us for the new things' instead of 'inform us about new products' and 'make the sell grow' instead of 'increase sales'. The repetition of simple words like 'good', 'bad', and 'things' limits the range of expression. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to advertising and business, and practice using these words in correct sentence structures to convey your meaning more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the text difficult to follow. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('was in market', 'when the delivery arrived'), subject-verb agreement ('adds are good', 'mostly seo make'), and sentence structure ('my opinon is this that this is true'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage. Proofreading your work for these fundamental errors before finalizing your response will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.
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