Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some peoples think that advertising is more helpful in buy things. But some think that the advertising is so common now a days there for thy don't pay mover for it.I think that it is very good way to give information about any thing which people not have knowledge about it. But it was a waste of money because there many peoples who advertise the same product.
First of all, The advertisement is very excellent way to interduce the product easily and people can see ad of that product and clear the negative points about that product. If they didn't know from where we can buy the product by help of advertisement people can easily find the product in market. They also able to know the prize of that product. They can see that they are able to buy it or not. People can also get different deals with that product.
Secondly, Now a days the advertisement is very common. Everyone wants to sold there product very fast and easily. They gave some deals with them. Many people gives the ads of same product with different deals. Every one was advertising there product in market. Therefore, Many people are not paying attention to it. They think that it is waste of time and money. So, They don't pay heed to advertisement of any product.
To conclude, The advertising is nice way to give knowledge about any product and it makes other people clear about any thing. But advertisement is very common.Therefore, People don't like to send money on it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding why advertising is successful or why it is ignored are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the point about 'deals' is mentioned in both body paragraphs without being fully explored or contrasted. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are somewhat superficial, preventing the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should provide specific examples or logical explanations for why consumers might ignore advertisements, such as 'ad fatigue' or the rise of ad-blocking technology, rather than simply stating it is a 'waste of time'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'there for' is used incorrectly as a conjunction, and 'First of all' and 'Secondly' are used in a somewhat simplistic manner. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'give information about any thing which people not have knowledge about it'. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the expression of more complex ideas. You frequently use basic terms like 'good way', 'thing', and 'product'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'pay mover' (likely meant 'pay more attention') and 'sold there product' (should be 'sell their product'). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'interduce', 'prize' instead of 'price') indicate a limited range of vocabulary. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to marketing and consumer behaviour, and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'there many peoples who advertise' (missing 'are') and 'they are able to buy it or not'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent issues regarding comma usage and capitalization. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over complex structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, and reduce the frequency of basic grammatical errors that occur in almost every sentence.
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