Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years, the advertising play a critical role to influenced people aslo give information about the products. Some people argued that advertising is so comom that we no longer pay attention to it. I will discuss this trend and provide a logical conclusion.
To start with, there are many reasons associated with it. The first are foremost point is increse in technology. To explain this, due to technoplogy most of the people reduce the use TV which contain most of the ad, such as now people are usig smartphone, latop and other platforms which contain temoprary ad also with the option of skip. So most of the people give less intreset to advertisment and skip them rather then watch it. Moreover, the another point is false claims. To justify this, in todays the schems and fraud are increse day by day. Therefor, people do not want to take risk by spending money on that product which is show in advertisment by influensers.
On the other hand, the point associated to the first statement is given information about the new products. To elobrate it, when the advertisment give the information about the products which are new in market with the evidence of using it by big celebrities. So may it provide a stcifaction to other coustmer about the product.
To conclude, although the numerous point is related t o false claims about the product and other about the incresing technology. While, it give the information about the new product and prevent from waseful spending.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that advertising is extremely successful and that it is too common to be noticed—while providing a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the ideas are relatively basic and lack full development. For example, the argument regarding technology mentions that people use smartphones and laptops instead of watching TV ads, but this point is not deeply explored or fully linked to the prompt's core debate. The arguments regarding false claims and celebrity endorsements are relevant, but their explanation remains somewhat superficial. Overall, the response meets the requirements for Band 5.0 as it addresses the task partially and presents ideas that are limited and under-developed, though a clear position is discernible.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into clear paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion, showing some basic organization. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed and lacks clear overall cohesion. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate, repetitive, or poorly utilized, such as starting sentences with awkward transitional phrases like 'The first are foremost point' and 'To justify this, in todays the schems and fraud are increse day by day.' Referencing and pronoun use are also weak at times, making the logical relationship between sentences occasionally difficult to follow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion falls short of Band 6. Therefore, a score of 5.0 is appropriate due to inadequate and repetitive cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student displays a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for the task, touching upon relevant themes such as technology, smartphones, and celebrity endorsements. However, there are numerous noticeable lexical errors and incorrect word forms throughout the text, such as 'play a critical role to influenced' instead of 'influencing', 'comom' instead of 'common', 'technoplogy', 'latop', 'temoprary', 'intreset', 'schems', 'influensers', 'elobrate', and 'stcifaction'. These errors and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a vocabulary range that struggles to move beyond basic terms accurately. This performance aligns closely with the Band 5 descriptor, where errors in word choice and spelling are noticeable and occasionally impede smooth reading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the execution is heavily flawed by frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the advertising play a critical role to influenced people aslo give information', 'due to technoplogy most of the people reduce the use TV which contain most of the ad', and 'the product which is show in advertisment by influensers.' These errors involve subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, passive voice construction, and missing prepositions. While the writer attempts complex sentences with relative clauses ('which contain most of the ad'), these attempts are frequently faulty and cause strain for the reader. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors and poorly controlled complex structures, the response sits firmly at Band 5.0.
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