Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many peoples say that advertising is extremely successful at the persuading to buy things. Advertising means using ads and hire the influncer that make the video,we have needed to advertiss the different project.
On the other hand,some people think that advertising is so common that we no longer attention to it. From my everday life,experience and obsevation. From my point of view,that statement is false,because advertisement are very important in modern world. Advertisement means already i have discuss,using ads and hire the most popular youtuber and tiktok creator,or different wibsites and app star make the video on the project. That i have needed for the advertisement.
Advantages of the advertisement,attention and many people came and visit the shop and store and buy thing that has needed. Popularity increased and attention of the people increase. I have fully agreed with the statement,that advertising is extremely succussful at persuading us to buy.
Now i have discuss about the the people thats say advertising is so common that no longer pay attention to it. I have dis agree with this statements .From my everday life,experience and obsevation. I think advertising are important thats is also used in the modern world. Reason is that,young people its means modern generation. Are also used the mobile phone and many hours see the video on different platform like tiktok,snapchart,etc. They belive on the video that provide the attention about thing.
From both point of of view I have completely agree with first statement and people advertising is extremely successful at persuadin us to buy things.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both views outlined in the prompt regarding the effectiveness versus commonality of advertising, and gives a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For example, the student reiterates points about influencers, TikTok, and everyday life multiple times without extending the arguments into deeper analysis. The discussion tends to over-generalise and lack sophisticated elaboration. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the lack of fully developed supporting arguments keeps this response at a Band 5 level according to the task response descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays some overall organization into distinct paragraphs, but there is no clear logical progression throughout. Cohesive devices are either inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the frequent restarting of sentences with 'From my everday life, experience and obsevation' and 'Now i have discuss about'. Paragraphing is attempted, but transitions between ideas are abrupt and mechanical. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, particularly with pronoun use. These features align closely with the Band 5 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'advertising', 'ads', 'video', and 'people'. There are noticeable errors in word formation and choice, such as 'Many peoples' instead of 'people', 'hire the influncer', and 'wibsites'. Spelling errors such as 'advertiss', 'everday', 'obsevation', 'succussful', 'snapchart', and 'belive' occur throughout the text. These limitations and errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing the lexical resource at a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student uses a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent, major errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('advertisement are very important', 'young people its means modern generation. Are also used'), incorrect verb forms ('hire the influncer that make', 'we have needed to advertiss'), and missing prepositions or articles. Punctuation is also erratic. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and reflect the Band 4 descriptors.
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