Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
While it is commanly belived by few individuals advertising is helpfull for people to buy right things. opponents contend that it is not more important.this essay will discuss both point of view and also give my perssonal opinion.
On the one hand,thr reasons why advertising is usefull is that it hepls to people give right knowladge about things so that everyone can know they should buy it or not because advertising tell the benifits of product and how they show result also so it can also helpfull for money saving because people get imformation in advance from banners so they can not buy useless products.
On the other hand, there some reasons why some people feel it is useless is that give wrong and very less information. For example,some advertising platefrms give irrlivent and half information about the product which become big reason of money wastage. because some people get product in hurry after watching add of this without resarching by himself on internet. The other reason of this is fake products For example, When company make any product they give there advertisment also for rising the sell of product . But some fake companies started to sell fake product with same labels on lowest price therefor, when people buy this product they did not get positive result. So that they think advertiser give wrong infomation.
In conclusion, this essay discussed why some people say advertisements are helpfull and others say its comman including by geting right knowladge of product. ase well as others think its wastage of money and give wrong information.Nevertheless in my opinion i agree with thr second statement.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that advertising is persuasive and that it is too common or useless—and provides a personal opinion agreeing with the second statement. The position is clear throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on how advertising helps save money or provides useful knowledge is brief and under-developed, while the counter-argument regarding fake products lacks sufficient extension. While the prompt is adequately addressed to fulfill the basic requirements, the lack of deeper elaboration and the tendency to over-generalise place this performance firmly at Band 5.0 according to the task response descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay has a recognisable structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing some organisation. However, there is no clear overall progression due to repetitive phrasing and weak logical links. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'On the one hand,thr reasons why...' and 'The other reason of this is...'. Furthermore, paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs often breaks down, making the flow disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors further impede smooth reading. These features align closely with the Band 5 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'commanly', 'belived', 'helpfull', 'knowladge', 'benifits', 'perssonal', 'platefrms', 'irrlivent', 'add', and 'infomation'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'persuading', 'opponents', and 'wastage', but these are often accompanied by word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'give right knowladge', 'watching add'). The range is minimally adequate for the task, but noticeable spelling and word-formation errors cause some difficulty for the reader, which fits the Band 4.5 to Band 5.0 profile. A score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'while it is commanly belived by few individuals advertising is helpfull...' and 'so that everyone can know they should buy it or not because advertising tell...'. However, attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to run-on sentences and grammatical errors. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'advertising tell', 'company make'), and articles. Punctuation is also weak, with missing spaces and capitalisation errors. Because frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and accurate structures are in the minority, a band score of 5.0 is assigned.
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