Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Advertising is very commanly used in all over the world for making things popular like mahindra company newly loanched their car in indian market but if they want to popular in india so they need to advertising their newly launched car in indian market. there are so many different type of advertising agencies in india that serculate all advertising in all TV channels.

On the one hand, advertising is best way to gain popularity is very few time and when we doing advertisement fist we have to pay some money to make their advertising in all the platforms like in social media, TV channels. advertisment is very comman way to become popular in the world like in india there are so many vehicles company and there are so many comptition in india but indian population who are not educated they really trust on advertising of any thing.

oOn the another hand, many people think that advertising is no longer effective because majority of people in all around the world know that what they wan to buy nd what is it's important in their daily life so the future of advertising on any platform is not pay attention. for example in india and mainly in my society the maximum population don't trust on advertisment until they don't use.

In conclusion, there are two types of people that believe on advertising things and another who don't trust on advertising but in future the population of not trusting population increasing all around the world because now a days neople are so awair in their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on advertising and offering an opinion, which places it within the mid-range of expectations. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times repetitive. For instance, the discussion relies heavily on a single example regarding a car company in India and local consumer trust, rather than exploring broader societal or economic perspectives. The student's position is discernible in the conclusion and body paragraphs, but the arguments lack sufficient depth and extension. To reach a higher standard, the writer needs to expand on the provided arguments with more fully developed explanations and varied examples that thoroughly address all parts of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a discernible overall structure with distinct paragraph divisions representing the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by inadequate and mechanical use of cohesive devices, such as repetitive transitions like 'on the one hand' and 'on the another hand'. Referencing is also unclear at times, leaving relationships between sentences ambiguous. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal logical flow is compromised by run-on sentences and a lack of smooth signposting. To improve in this area, the student should ensure that cohesive devices are used more naturally and accurately, and that each paragraph follows a clear, progressive line of thought.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, containing noticeable errors that frequently cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent spelling mistakes, such as 'commanly', 'loanched', 'serculate', 'comptition', 'wan', and 'awair', alongside incorrect word forms and awkward collocations like 'vehicles company' and 'gain popularity is very few time'. The range of vocabulary is restricted, and attempts to use less common words generally result in noticeable errors that hinder smooth communication. To achieve a stronger outcome, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire, pay closer attention to word formation, and ensure accurate spelling for basic and intermediate terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures employed are limited, consisting mainly of simple sentences alongside faulty attempts at complex forms. Frequent errors are present across various structures, including verb tense inconsistencies, article omissions, pluralisation errors, and prepositions within grammatical patterns, such as 'trust on advertising' instead of 'trust advertising'. Run-on sentences without appropriate punctuation further reduce clarity, and these frequent errors often cause strain and difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate greater control over basic sentence boundaries, improve subject-verb agreement, and develop accuracy in complex grammatical constructions.

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