Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, majority of many urban society they are adverting the products and upload photo in the social media to rise their item more sell. However, other poeple argue that advertising are loss of money due to individuals are not perferring to make more attention on their materials. I will Discuss both view in the given below that residents have to make the ads on public sectore or not.

At the initial stage, numerous today were beign making advertising ads on many online platform to raising their item into the many audiance. Moreover, fore make successful at persuading new material citizen with facilitate of technology they try to innovation new item and directly seen to the many public thus youngster have beign intrested to perchased the material with beneficial discount. For instance, recently the one products was not successful and that was Washing machine in the market but with help of internet the one persone had upload the picture in their social media account and aftermath few month the products rose dramatically in many urban countries. As a result, many homes mother not have to wash the cloths with hands rather then machines.

On the other hand, adverstising is so common that now we no longer pay more attention and we not take serious part of life. Furthermore, many youngster today are making ads in many urban center and stick with picture to see the material but people ignore the item and after few months they realised that this was significant part of our life to take for homes. For Example, In India, few weeks ago one item that had lunched and also in many place their banner and poster make but no one adults are intrested to buy. On account of advertising was vital part of oue life because it developed many different kinds more new productes.

To conclude, people today have to make ads on internet of their item so in the future it will rise gradually and individuals are more buying for their home and personal life. From my prespective, advertising is the best way to developed the material in front of people hence in the future humans should havr to developing more their products in internet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the first body paragraph argues that online advertising can increase sales, while the second says people may ignore advertising because it is so common. Your conclusion also gives a clear preference for advertising as a way to promote products. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The washing-machine example suggests a link between social media promotion and increased sales, but the explanation is difficult to follow and does not clearly show how the example proves the point. The opposing view is less convincing: the India example says people were not interested, then shifts to advertising being important without explaining that contrast. Develop each view with a clear reason and a directly relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting opposing views, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Transitions such as “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and some linking phrases do not show a logical relationship. For example, the washing-machine example moves from an online post to household benefits without clearly connecting the steps, while the second body paragraph shifts from ignored advertisements to their importance. References such as “the one products” and “this” also make it hard to identify what is being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to its main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “persuading,” “beneficial discount,” “dramatically,” and “significant part,” and you use terms such as “social media,” “banner,” and “poster” to discuss advertising. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “item,” “material,” and “many,” and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “rise their item more sell,” “make more attention,” and “developed many different kinds more new productes” are not natural English. Spelling errors, including “adverting,” “perchased,” and “intrested,” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of precise advertising and sales vocabulary, and check spelling and common word partnerships.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “but,” and “rather than,” and the overall message can usually be understood. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in examples such as “advertising are” and “they try to innovation”; articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “Nowadays, majority of many urban society they are…” Several sentences combine ideas without clear grammatical links, which can make the reader work to understand the meaning. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Review articles, plural forms, and consistent verb tense.

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