Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, advertising is a main way to attract the people for purchase something, due to this scheme helps more people in selling their products througout the world.Mostly people uses this techniques in recent times when their industries launched the new products advertisements is the only way to attracts the people on this products this short clips shows the features and basic ingredients thats are use in this products though this selling products level in markets at peak level.However this short clips beneficial for every food making and other cosmetics makers industrilists. Firstly, they builds trust on people they purchase something from markets on the basis of advertisements clip thats we saw on social media and televisions at homes.Secondly through this people have much of times to watch related products reels on mobile phones and share with multiple people even on every people follow types of trend.Cosequently, this scheme providing a lots of benefit to their owners.Personally I always favour this schemes.On the other hand some of people argue that adverstising is time wasting scheme beacuse they are lazy person and they do not take intrests on thats products if they watch some ad on social media they scroll the reel and move on together, they are introverts and do not pay attention on thats products also they insests their family members for do not waste time on that short clips thats you watch on social media and televisions if they want something about products and garments they purchase everythings from markets without watch any advertisments clips on social media and other resources.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a personal preference with “Personally I always favour this schemes,” so the response is relevant to the question. The first view is supported by points about advertisements showing product features and building trust, while the opposing view is represented by people scrolling past adverts or choosing products without watching them. However, the discussion is uneven and the ideas remain general: the claim that adverts build trust is not explained with a specific example, and the second view is described mainly through people’s habits rather than why advertising’s prevalence makes it ineffective. Your position is also not fully clear because you favour advertising’s benefits without directly weighing the two views. Develop and compare the arguments more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response around the two sides, signalled by “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand,” and the reader can identify the broad topic of each section. However, the opening section contains many ideas joined into a long, difficult-to-follow sequence, and there is little clear paragraphing to separate the discussion and your opinion. Some links are mechanical or unclear: “Consequently” does not clearly follow from the preceding point, while “this scheme” and “these products” have uncertain references. The response also moves between product promotion, social-media habits, and people’s personalities without a clear progression. Use distinct paragraphs for the introduction, each view, and the conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “advertisements,” “features,” “ingredients,” “social media,” and “products,” which allows the reader to understand the general subject. There are also attempts at topic-specific phrasing such as “build trust.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making meaning harder to follow: “attract the people for purchase something,” “selling products level,” and “insests their family members” are not natural choices. Spelling errors such as “througout,” “adverstising,” and “industrilists” also reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate collocations for discussing advertising and consumer behaviour, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences and use some subordinate clauses, for example “when their industries launched the new products” and “if they watch some ad on social media.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries make the response difficult to read. Examples include “Mostly people uses,” “they builds trust,” and “the only way to attracts”; these should use consistent subject–verb forms. Several clauses run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly in the opening and final sections, so the relationships between ideas are unclear. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using conjunctions and punctuation.

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