Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Advertising is everywhere we live, its shoes on television,billboards, and specially on the products, the people bought them the most.Some society inhabitents thinks that advertising is more important in their life for getting attention in firmly way and they we buy more things in this way.While some argue that the advertising is less significant and we also daily ignore it so we connot pay attention on shopping in this way.In this essay, i will discuss both points and i also give my idea about the best way of advertising and which one attract us more.

Some inhabitents believe that advertising is attract us more and by this people bought such things more and more. Firstly, advertising in different way attract more people in substainsul way,when the adds is playing and display in public places specially in famous places so people attract more pay more attenttion on the adds,therefore more and more compniese heavly relay on adds and advertisment.moreover,they also advertise their products in this way.

On the other hand,some people have the concept about the advertsing is never attract the people and people often negletact it more and never pay attention.its sure that people are often watch ths adds on the apps and television and they feel about it more boring,consequently they just ignore it.morethat,when people watch the adds and advertising they considerd it fake and they calls its fake review about the product,Therfore the ignore it.

In my opinion, firstly advertising attracr more people by dispalying the adds and getting attention of people in display it public places, in contrast advertising never impact on people life.most of the people jusst ignore it,they have bad impact about the advertsing.

In conclusion, i strongly believe that adversing is more significant and it boost up the products sell just it less down with passege of time but its allver more important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. The first body paragraph presents the view that advertising attracts buyers, while the next explains that people may ignore adverts or distrust them as fake; the conclusion also states that advertising remains important. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opinion paragraph says advertising attracts people but then says it “never impact[s]” on people and that most ignore it. The supporting ideas are also limited and under-developed. For example, the claim that adverts in famous public places attract attention is not illustrated or explained in detail. Make your own view explicit and consistent, then develop each main point with a clear reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, an opinion paragraph and a conclusion. This helps readers identify the main stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and linking expressions are often mechanical or inaccurately used. For instance, “Firstly,” “moreover,” and “therefore” connect claims without making the relationship between them clear, while “In my opinion” is followed by conflicting points. Some sentences run together, making the sequence of ideas harder to track. Use one central idea per paragraph, connect each explanation directly to that idea, and use a smaller number of precise transitions. Clearer sentence boundaries and references would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “billboards,” “public places,” “ignore,” and “fake review,” and you use some repetition to keep the subject clear. However, the range is limited and many word choices, collocations and spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “advertising is attract us,” “people attract more,” “heavly relay on adds,” and “boost up the products sell.” Repeated use of “adds,” “people,” and “advertising” also limits precision. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “advertisements attract consumers” and “companies rely heavily on advertising.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “while,” “when,” and “because”-type reasoning, and the reader can usually identify the broad meaning. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “Some society inhabitants thinks” and “advertising is attract us”; articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “the advertising is less significant.” Punctuation and capitalisation errors, including run-on sentences and lowercase “i,” further affect readability. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries during revision.

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