Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The first chart shows the destination of anthropology graduates from one university. the table show the salaries of antrhropology graduates after 5 years' work. the full time work number is higesting in all graduates the full time graduates number is 52%. the second higher number is part time work this number is 15% and unemployed number is 12%. the not known number meaning this number data is not avableing and this number is 8%. the low number is part time postguad study of anthropology is only 5%. the table of salaries first employment is freelance consultants. the freelance who earning 25000 doller is number 49999 and is 5% and other 15% eaning and last number of freelance is make 99999 and is percentages 40%. the other one is government sector is lowest number is 55 and 50% oof number is earnind about [redacted phone] or more. the private companies make 10% 0f49999 and the 30% of earning [redacted phone] and plus.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two visuals and report several relevant figures, including 52% in full-time work, 15% in part-time work, and 12% unemployed. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main patterns, and some figures are misreported or unclear. For example, 52% refers to graduates in full-time work, not “full time graduates”; the salary bands are not accurately described when you say freelance consultants earning “25000 dollar is number 49999.” You also omit the 8% in full-time postgraduate study and the 5% salary band for private companies, while giving little comparison across employment types. To improve, summarise the dominant destinations and highest salary bands first, then select accurate comparisons from both visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the order of the visuals, moving from graduate destinations to salaries, so the reader can broadly see what is being described. However, it is presented as one continuous sequence of short statements, with no clear overview or paragraphing to separate the two sets of information. Repeated phrases such as “the number” and “the other one” make the progression mechanical, and links between figures are often unclear. For instance, “the freelance who earning 25000 doller is number 49999” does not clearly connect the salary range to its percentage. Organise the answer into an introduction, an overview, and separate detail paragraphs, using clear comparisons such as “by contrast” or “whereas” where appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “destination,” “salaries,” “freelance consultants,” “government sector,” and “private companies.” This gives the response a basic range suited to describing the visuals. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or inaccurately formed, and several spelling and word-choice errors make details difficult to understand: “higesting,” “avableing,” “postguad,” and “earning” are examples. Phrases such as “the low number” and “make 10%” are also imprecise for reporting data. Build a reliable set of chart-description expressions, including “accounted for,” “the largest proportion,” “salary band,” and “earned,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use a simple subject–verb pattern, and the response attempts to communicate a sequence of figures. However, the range of structures is very limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation and agreement sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “the table show” lacks subject–verb agreement, while “the full time work number is higesting in all graduates” is not a well-formed sentence. Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, as in “the not known number meaning this number data is not avableing and this number is 8%.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related information with controlled clauses: “Full-time work was the most common destination, at 52%, whereas 12% were unemployed.”

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