Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustrates what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.

Overall, the given diagram shows what anthropology graduated people from one university did after completing their degree and the table elaborate the salaries of anthropologist in recent five years.

This picture displays some figures of designation of anthropology graduates from one university. Moreover, full-time workers at their peak and that is 52% of all. On the other hand, proportion of part-time work + postgrad student only 5%.

However, some students likes full-time work with post graduation and they consume 8% of this part, while not known having same figure is 8%. Furthermore, there are so many people who are uemployed after getting degree and the are about 12% of all. The percentage of part-time workers are quite better as compare to others except full-time workers and that is 15%. These are all the main features of these tables.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the main destination figure correctly: full-time work accounts for 52%, while part-time work plus postgraduate study is the smallest group at 5%. You also report the 8% and 12% categories. However, the response does not summarise the salary table at all, despite this being a central part of the task, and it gives no comparisons among employment sectors or salary bands. Some descriptions are also unclear, such as “full-time work with post graduation” for the 8% category. The response is 142 words, below the required 150; the 13 words copied from the prompt were not counted. To improve, cover both visuals, select key salary contrasts, and provide a concise overview of the most notable patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, an overview, and further details about graduate destinations. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “On the other hand,” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is limited: the response repeats the chart’s subject in the introduction, overview, and next paragraph, then ends without addressing the salary table. Some links do not express a clear contrast or relationship, and “These are all the main features of these tables” is an abrupt conclusion rather than a useful summary. Organise the response into a clear overview followed by focused details for each visual, and use linking words only where the relationship between points is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “graduates,” and “full-time workers,” so the reader can generally identify the topic. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or awkward: “anthropology graduated people,” “designation,” and “they consume 8% of this part” do not express the intended information naturally. “Uemployed” is also misspelled, and “quite better as compare to” is not an appropriate comparison phrase. These choices make parts of the report difficult to interpret and the vocabulary range remains limited. Build a reliable set of terms for describing destinations and salary distributions, and check that each verb and comparison phrase fits the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “while” and a sentence beginning “Moreover.” Some basic meaning is conveyed, but errors in agreement, sentence construction, and articles are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “some students likes” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “the are about 12%” is an incomplete construction. The overview sentence beginning “Overall” also has an unclear structure, and “the table elaborate” does not agree in number. Aim first for accurate, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb; then practise combining comparisons using “whereas” or “while” without losing grammatical control.

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