Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the activities of Anthropologist graduates after passing passing their undergraduate degree. This is the data of one university students.

Overall, Undergratuate are devided into six different groups. Those who start jobs are subgrouped into three categories like freelance consultant,government sector, and private sector.

As we are seeing , maximum number of this university undergraduates move toward jobs and are about 52%. Some also busy in part time work and they are 15%, similar to this some are engaged in both work and further studies and they are 12%. Some students neither get a job and not persued their degree and some only busy in post graduate studies. Only 8% are involve in these things. There is a small percentage of students, no one known abut them. They are only 8 percent

Those who are working categorize into three sectors. They are earning $25000 to 1lac plus.. 50% of government servent earning more than 1lac, while in freelanceing only 40% are earning more than 1lac the reamining are below to this range and in private sector only 30% are receiving 1lac plus salary and remaing employees are less than this slab.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main destination, full-time work at 52%, and include several other categories, as well as comparing the highest salary band across the three employment sectors. However, some figures are misreported or unclear: the 12% refers to unemployment, not graduates engaged in both work and further study (that group is 5%). The sentence about students who “neither get a job” also confuses unemployment with full-time postgraduate study, which is 8%. Your overview mentions six groups but does not clearly summarise the main pattern in the salary table. To strengthen the response, report the destinations accurately and highlight that government employees most often earn $100,000 or more, while private-company employees are more concentrated in the $50,000–74,999 band.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on graduate destinations, and a final paragraph on salaries. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the destination paragraph is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in “Some students neither get a job and not persued their degree,” where the categories are not clearly distinguished. Linking phrases such as “similar to this” and “As we are seeing” are awkward or imprecise, and the final salary comparison would be clearer if each sector’s figures were presented in a consistent order. Use clear topic sentences and connect comparisons directly, rather than relying on conversational transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “undergraduate degree,” “post graduate studies,” “government sector,” and “salary,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For example, “busy in part time work” is not a natural way to describe employment, and “no one known abut them” does not clearly express that outcomes are unknown. There are also spelling errors such as “Undergratuate,” “devided,” and “reamining,” alongside informal expressions such as “1lac plus” and “slab.” Practise precise chart language, including “accounted for,” “were employed,” and “salary bracket,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons with “while,” and the reader can usually identify the broad subject of each sentence. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction and verb forms sometimes obscure the data. For instance, “Those who start jobs are subgrouped” shifts tense and uses an awkward passive construction; “some are engaged in both work and further studies and they are 12%” has unclear reference and sentence structure. The opening also repeats “passing,” while “Some students neither get a job and not persued their degree” contains faulty coordination and verb formation. Build accuracy with straightforward patterns such as “A further 15% worked part-time” and “In government, 50% earned over $100,000,” then add more complex comparisons once these are secure.

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