Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart illustrates that the destination of anthropology graduates from one university across the salaries of anthropology graduates after five years work in different times in different fields work.
Firstly,I will mentioned the full time work which approximately,52% of all other work which was done by all anthropology graduates is maximum.Secondly,the tye of employment which remains steady in the fields of freelance consultants and government sector their salaries are around about 5%.In addition to,that is considered to the minimum salaries of anthropology graduates.
Furthermore,the 8% in part-time as well the post graduates study is included in the anthropology graduates destination from one university.Moreover,the part time work include about 15% in anthropology students in one university.However,their type of employment in which their salaries are fluctuating in five years are described as private companies in different years 10%,35%,25%,and 30%.Likewise other is also fluctuating in different years.
To summarize that,the anthropology graduates in one university have different salaries as well as their percentages are also different in the graduation era.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The introduction is confusing and grammatically flawed, making it difficult to understand what the charts represent. While some figures are mentioned, the analysis is disjointed and lacks a logical comparison between the two distinct datasets (destinations vs. salaries). Key features, such as the trends in salary over time, are not clearly identified or explained. The response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The information provided is often inaccurate or poorly linked to the visual data, resulting in a failure to fully address the requirements of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there are some attempts at paragraphing and the use of cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore', these are used mechanically and often incorrectly. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the relationship between sentences is frequently unclear. Referencing is weak, and the transition between the discussion of graduate destinations and salary fluctuations is abrupt. The overall structure is confusing, which hinders the reader's ability to follow the information presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'graduation era' and 'destination of anthropology graduates... across the salaries'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe data, relying on repetitive and basic language. Some phrases are unintelligible due to poor word order and incorrect usage, which significantly impacts the clarity of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, punctuation, and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'I will mentioned' is incorrect, and many sentences are fragmented or run-on. The use of complex structures is attempted but consistently results in errors, such as 'the type of employment which remains steady in the fields of freelance consultants and government sector their salaries are around about 5%'. The lack of control over basic grammar makes the text difficult to read.
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