Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart shows the destination of anthropology graduates and The table chart shows the salary in three types of employment
Overall,it is evident that the full time work had accounted for highest proportion ,meanwhile private companies employee account for the
lowest salary
Turning ,to the details 52 % student got full time working job , while 5% of students got part time job. Thereafter full postgraduate students had 8% working.similar unknown students accounted for proportion of 8%.part time work recorded the figure of the 15 %,by contrast unemployed students got 12 % jobs
Probing further,5% worker of freelance consultant and the government sector salary recorded equal amount between $25,000 and $50,000.while private companies 10 %worker listed in this salary group.the highest figure of salary witnessed by the government in the $100,000 with 30%.next , the 40 %of freelance workers listed between the salary group of $75000 and $99,999. Lastly goverment employee hit the peak 50% in 100,000 salary group
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both the pie chart and the table. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, logical flow. While you identified the highest and lowest categories, some data points are presented in a confusing manner, such as the description of the salary groups. The summary of the table is particularly difficult to follow because the relationship between the employment types and the salary brackets is not clearly articulated. To improve, ensure that you group data logically rather than listing figures sequentially, and provide a more cohesive overview of the trends rather than just stating individual percentages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often awkward or incorrect, such as 'Turning ,to the details' and 'Probing further'. These transitions feel forced rather than natural. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different employment sectors and their respective salary distributions. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'got', 'recorded', and 'figure'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'full time working job' instead of 'full-time employment' and 'unknown students' which is not a clear description of the data. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', 'the majority of', or 'a significant proportion'. Spelling and punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas, also detract from the overall quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('the highest proportion', 'the lowest salary'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'Overall,it is evident that the full time work had accounted for highest proportion ,meanwhile private companies employee account for the lowest salary'. The punctuation is inconsistent, with many missing or misplaced commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your subjects and verbs agree before attempting more complex structures.
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