Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This chat is about students graduated from university in anthropology and I will tell in upcoming paragraph about their jobs, salaries and also what they do after their digree.
0n the first hand , we can see 52% students do their full time work and after this part time work Student data is 15% also 8% people data is not available so we did not a discuss about this but also 5% do their full time post graduation study after their graduation from college
On the second hand we can see type of employment list and their categories between freelance construction government sector and private companies in this data in first category 5% students earn between 25000 to 499 and 15% and more than 50000 dollars and 80% are more than 75% dollar but in government sector 50% students earn 100,000 dollars and 5 and 15% data is same as freelancer but 30% people earn between 75,000 and 99,999 dollar but private companies give 25000 to 10% and more than 50000 to 35%
Overall, 52% students find their jobs and also 15% do further study but we can see clearly in salary of graduation medical students they can earn good income in government sector but also they have a very good purchase in freelance work most of graduate note on good money in private sector.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. The description of the chart is fragmented and contains significant inaccuracies, such as misinterpreting the percentages and categories. For example, the claim that '80% are more than 75% dollar' is confusing and does not reflect the data provided. The summary lacks a logical selection of main features, and the comparison between sectors is poorly executed, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key trends. The response needs to focus on identifying the most significant data points rather than listing figures in a disorganized manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inappropriate, such as 'On the first hand' and 'On the second hand,' which are not standard academic phrases. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between the two charts is abrupt. The lack of clear signposting makes the information difficult to follow. To improve, you should use more natural linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus that contributes to the overall summary of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'chat' instead of 'chart,' 'digree' instead of 'degree,' and 'purchase' used incorrectly to describe salary. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data points effectively. The repetition of basic terms and the misuse of technical or descriptive language hinder the clarity of the report. You should focus on learning specific vocabulary for describing data, such as 'proportion,' 'fluctuate,' 'majority,' and 'sector,' and ensure you use them in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing articles. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and punctuation is often misused or absent. For instance, '52% students do their full time work' should be '52% of students work full-time.' The range of structures is limited to simple sentences, and attempts at more complex constructions are often grammatically incorrect. Improving basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing prepositions and incorrect verb forms is essential for a higher score.
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