Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart reported shows Anthropology graduates from one university after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.
Overall, destination of anthropology graduates from and university therefore salaries of anthropology graduates after five years work and industry experience was type of employment difference income provided and work also freelance consultant showing the benefits mainly highest in full time work in our anthropology government sector, Private companies had a government sector are full time work and private companies are working own businesses were are this generation is working and study sector highly demanded but all are work in part time jobs
Salaries of anthropology graduates later of years was type of employmen salary are highly dependent upon their work experience and all job sector
Same time students are work in park time work in 15% avoid and postgrad study in 5% holl sector then full time work time are higher has been 52% all over .unemployment also in this generation are 12%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to clearly present the data provided in the chart and table. While it mentions some categories like 'full time work' and 'unemployment', the information is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the comparison between the different employment sectors is largely incoherent. The data points mentioned, such as '15%' and '52%', are not contextualized effectively, making it difficult for the reader to understand the relationship between the degree and the subsequent career paths. To improve, you must structure your report by grouping related data and clearly stating the most significant findings.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The sentences are disjointed, and the lack of proper paragraphing makes it difficult to follow the flow of information. There is a severe lack of cohesive devices; the few that are used, such as 'Overall', do not effectively link the ideas together. The text reads as a series of disconnected phrases rather than a cohesive report. To improve, you should organize your writing into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details. Use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often used incorrectly, which significantly impedes communication. Phrases like 'holl sector' and 'park time work' are unclear or misspelled. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately, relying on repetitive and basic terms. There is little evidence of an attempt to use academic or topic-specific language related to employment or statistics. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant proportion', 'the majority of', or 'remained stable'. You should also work on using precise terminology for the categories shown in the chart.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to understand. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order, such as in the sentence 'Private companies had a government sector are full time work'. Many sentences are incomplete or run-on, which obscures the intended meaning. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic structures used are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence construction before attempting more complex forms. Pay close attention to basic punctuation and ensure that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.
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