Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The supplied chats shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years
Overall it is crystal clear that the highest salaries in work after five years of full-time work while, the lowest destination of anthropologist of part-time work and postgrad study
As it is presented in the chart the destination of full time work graduates is 52%.Moreover the part-time work destination of anthropologist graduates are 15%.futhermore the destination of part time work and postgrad study .AS well as, the full time postgrad study is 8% in destination of anthropology graduates.
Further more the not known persons destination of anthropologist graduates from one university is 8%.
According to the chart that the salaries of freelance consultants graduates after five years is 5% and reached at 40%. Moreover the government sector employ salaries are reached at $[redacted phone] with 50% increasement .Moreover the private Campanie employment increasing rate after 5 years are 30% with salaries of $[redacted phone]
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary. The overview is confusing and does not effectively highlight the main trends or comparisons. Several data points are presented in a fragmented manner, and the interpretation of the salary table is inaccurate, as the student confuses percentages with salary figures. The response lacks a logical selection of features, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key information from the charts. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant data points—such as the highest and lowest categories—and describing them clearly without misinterpreting the units of measurement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore' are used excessively and often incorrectly, which makes the flow mechanical and repetitive. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the data and the text is weak. The introduction is poorly formed, and the overall organisation does not guide the reader through the information effectively. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'increasement' (which is not standard English) and 'Campanie' (spelling error). The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, often relying on repetitive and simple phrasing. The misuse of terms like 'destination' to describe employment categories further hinders clarity. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning specific collocations for describing trends and data, such as 'accounted for', 'the majority of', or 'a significant proportion', and ensure accurate spelling of basic academic vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The supplied chats shows'), incorrect sentence structure, and missing articles. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are often poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and fragmented phrases. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Practising the formation of complex sentences will also help in achieving a higher band score.
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