Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The provided pie chart below depicts information about selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant years.

overall, the highest destination of anthropology graduates that is 52% moving further the lowest destination of anthropology graduates is 5% of part time workers while postgrad study .

It is crystal clear that the highest is full time work while the 8% of not know have there moving further 12% destination of anthropology graduates that is unemployed however 8% is full time postgrad study while 5% of part time work and postgraduates students moving further 15% is destination of part time work .

on the other hand, salariesof antrhropology graduates after five years that is

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the response abruptly ends while introducing the salary data, meaning the second part of the prompt is not addressed. While some data points are mentioned, the summary lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the categories. The inclusion of irrelevant phrases like 'selecting and reporting the main features' in the introduction suggests a misunderstanding of the task requirements. To improve, ensure all parts of the prompt are covered and provide a comprehensive summary of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The paragraphs are poorly structured, and the transition between ideas is often confusing or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'moving further'. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas effectively, making the text difficult to follow. The abrupt ending and the inclusion of an incomplete sentence at the end further disrupt the flow of information. To improve, focus on using clear paragraphing—one for the overview and one or two for the detailed data—and use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect related points.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing and struggles with accurate terminology related to data description. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'salariesof antrhropology' and 'not know have there'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing charts, such as 'account for', 'represent', and 'the majority of', and ensure that technical terms are spelled correctly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the highest destination of anthropology graduates that is 52%'. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject and verb, which impedes communication. The use of complex structures is largely absent or attempted unsuccessfully. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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