Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chat depicts the percentage of what Anthropology graduates did after graduation from one university. In addition, the table chat illustrates the salaries of the Anthropology graduates after 5 year's work.
Overall , its is cleared that students were more likely to do full-time work. In contrast, only few students were doin part-time work with their postgrad stduy. In addition, Government sectors are giving more salaries as compared to private sectors.
In pie chat, 52% students were doing full-time employment. Only 5% individuals were doing part-time jobs with postgrad study. However, the percentage of unemployment and part-time work are 15 and 12%. After graduation. Particularly, Full-timr postgrad study and not known after undergraduation have same similar percentage at 8%
In table , Government sector are giving $100,000+ amount of salary to 50% workers after 5 year's work . But private sector provide these range of salaries to only 30% employees.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both the pie chart and the table. You have identified the key trends, such as the prevalence of full-time employment and the salary disparity between government and private sectors. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, you mention the percentages for unemployment and part-time work but do not compare them effectively. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and integrate the data points more fluidly into your comparisons rather than listing them in isolation. The summary is accurate, but it lacks the depth required for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition', 'In contrast', and 'However'. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel repetitive. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'After graduation. Particularly, Full-timr postgrad study...', where the sentence structure is fragmented. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'chat' (likely a typo for 'chart') and 'doing'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'stduy', 'Full-timr', and 'undergraduation'. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms for 'employment' or 'salary' and ensure your spelling is accurate. The use of 'not known' is a bit informal; 'undisclosed' or 'unspecified' would be more appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Government sector are giving', 'students were doin'), punctuation ('Overall , its is cleared'), and article usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'Only few students were doin part-time work with their postgrad stduy'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses.
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