Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

this is a chart pie chart from "Destination of Anthropology graduates " this is gonna tell us about the full time work, part time work, part time work+ postgrad study , full time postgrad study and the unemployment rare and the un known

so the the percenof the full time worker is 52

This a pie chart of "Destination of Anthropology graduate" this is gonna tell us about the rate of the full time work, Part time work, Part time work + post grad study, full-time post grad study & the rate of Unemployment and the Not Known.

So the rate of full-time Work is 52%, Part time work is 15%, Part time work + postgrad study is 5% which is the lowest and 8% is of full time postgrad study and Unemployment rate is 12% and 8% are Not known.

There are 3 types of employment in the pie chart

1. freelance Consultants

2. Government Sector

3. Private Companies.

And the salaries of Anthropology graduate (after 5 years work) is

$25,000-49,999 of freelance Consultant 5% and Government Sector 5% and Private Companies 10%

$50,000-74,999 of freelance Consultant 5%, Government Sector 15% and Private Companies give 35%.

$ 75,000-99,000 in fuelance Consultant

it 40% in Government Sector

it 30% and in private Companies

it 25%.

Ounall $ 100,000+ in fuelance Consultant

give 40% in government Sector

it 50% in private Companies

30%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a coherent summary or report the main features of the data. Instead of writing a formal report, you have provided a list-like structure and fragmented sentences. You have attempted to list the data points, but you have not synthesized the information or made relevant comparisons as required by the task. The overview is missing, and the presentation of the salary data is disorganized and difficult to follow. To improve, you must write in full paragraphs, provide a clear overview of the main trends, and group the data logically rather than listing every single figure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. The use of bullet points and numbered lists is inappropriate for an IELTS Academic Task 1 report. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the text feels like a collection of disjointed notes rather than a cohesive essay. Paragraphing is not used effectively to structure the information. To improve, you should use linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect your sentences and organize your report into a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on the words provided in the prompt rather than using your own language to describe the data. There are several spelling errors, such as 'percenof', 'fuelance', and 'Ounall', which hinder readability. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is no attempt to use more sophisticated or academic language to describe trends or comparisons. You should focus on learning vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'fluctuated', and 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical structure is weak and inconsistent. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper subject-verb agreement, such as 'this is gonna tell us' and '8% is of full time postgrad study'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is often misused, particularly in the list of salary data. The frequent grammatical errors make the text difficult to follow. You need to focus on writing complete, grammatically correct sentences and practice using a variety of structures, including complex sentences with subordinate clauses.

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