Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
THE PIECHART ILLUSTRATE THE ANTHROPOLOGY FROM ONE UNIVERSITY WHO COMPLETED THEIR UNDERGRADUATE DEGREE COURSE. THIS CHART AND TABLE SAWS US THE SALARIES OF THE ANTHROPOLOGISTIC OF FIVE YEARS. HERE'S THE MAIN FEATURES AND COMPARISON BETWEEN THEM. THIS CHART EXPLAINS ABOUT THEIR'S RELEVANT DATA.THE OVERALL, FULL TIME WORK EMPLOYMENT ARE HAVE A MAJOR NUMBER OF WORK.ITS ABOUT LIKE 52% THEY ALL ARE FULL TIME EMPLOYEES. THE LEAST TYPE OF EMPLOYEES ARE 5% THEY ARE PART TIMER OR POSTGRADUATE STUDENTS WHO WORKS WHILE STUDYING.
IN THIS DIAGRAM THEY GIVE A TABLE WHICH GAVE US 5 YEARS DATA THE SALARIES OF ANTHROPOLOGY GRADUATES.THERE'S THREE TYPE OF EMPLOYMENT GIVEN IN THE TABLE. FIRST ONE IS FREELANCE CONSULTANTS WHO'S OVERALL RECORD IS 40%. THE SECOND ONE IS GOVERNMENT SECORT. THEY HAVE 50% SALARY RECORD ACCORDING TO THE TABLE. THE LAST ONE IS PRIVATE COMPANIES. THEY HAD AROUND 30% OF RECORD . ALL THREE OF THEM THERE'S 10% DIFFRENECE BETWEEN ALL EMPLOYMENT.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately report the data. The interpretation of the table is significantly flawed; for instance, the student describes the salary data as '50% salary record' for government, which misrepresents the actual figures provided in the prompt. Furthermore, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the main trends. The response focuses on listing individual data points rather than synthesising information or making meaningful comparisons. To improve, you must ensure that the data reported is factually accurate based on the provided charts and focus on identifying the most significant trends rather than simply listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is poor. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'The overall, full time work employment are have a major number of work.' The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between the ideas and the data. The transition between the pie chart description and the table description is abrupt. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'consequently' to link sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'anthropologistic' instead of 'anthropologists' and 'government secort' instead of 'government sector.' The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'major number of work.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, you should practice using specific terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'salary bracket,' and 'employment sector,' and ensure you check your spelling of basic academic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The piechart illustrate,' 'employment are have'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs. Proofreading for basic errors like 'their's' versus 'their' and ensuring consistent tense usage will also help raise your score.
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