Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This abovw pie chart illustrate the proportion of how anthropology graduates from single university dis after finishing their BS degree course. And their work in during 5 years .as compared to all values I must mention full time work that is almost 52% showing in pie chart then 15 % part time work for their expanse like their daily needs in which they work and can fulfill their wishes. While 12% were those who were all the time unemployed they were not in any activity where they can earn. Moreover 8 % was for both who was doing full time post graduate studies and same for those who were unknown. And plus 5 percent were those who was actually doing both things for instance they were doing studies and part time job same time.

I wrote this information due to above pie chart illustrate each and every proportion for whatever they did

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the provided chart, noting the most prominent category (full-time work at 52%) as well as other proportions such as part-time work, unemployment, further study, and unknown statuses. However, the student completely fails to address the second part of the prompt, which is the table showing salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Furthermore, there is unnecessary personal commentary and speculation included, such as mentioning part-time work is for 'their expanse like their daily needs'. Because a major component of the visual data (the salary table) is entirely omitted, the task is only partially addressed, which aligns with the descriptors for Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response lacks proper paragraphing and organization, presented almost as a single run-on block of text with arbitrary line breaks. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and awkward (e.g., 'And their work in during 5 years .as compared to all values I must mention...'). The progression of ideas is disjointed, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly. While some basic connectors like 'While' and 'Moreover' are attempted, their misuse leads to mechanical and faulty cohesion. This level of organization reflects the characteristics of Band 4.0 to 4.5, comfortably settling at Band 4.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. Words like 'work', 'pie chart', 'proportion', and 'studies' are repeated without effective variation. There are numerous spelling errors and typos throughout the text, including 'abovw', 'dis', 'expanse' (intended for expenses), and basic word choice inaccuracies. The lexical range is barely adequate to convey simple numerical data, and less-common lexical items are either absent or misused. These persistent errors and limited flexibility place the response firmly in the Band 4 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text contains a heavy burden of grammatical errors that frequently impede communication. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'pie chart illustrate', 'graduates... dis', 'eight percent was for both who was doing'), tense confusion ('in during 5 years'), and fragment sentences. Complex sentence structures are largely absent or severely flawed when attempted. Punctuation is neglected, leading to run-on structures. Because errors are extremely frequent and often distort meaning or strain the reader, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.

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