Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

There is a pie chart. It shows the destination of Anthropology graduates (from one university). In the further paragraphs we will write a report on that.

It is about different types of workers, like full time work is 52%, part_time work is almost around 15%, part time work + postgrad study is very low with 5%, full time postgrad study is just 3% above from the behinder wiyh 8%, unemployed are also here, and they are 12% and at the last not knowns are 8%.

It is telling the salaries of Antrhropology graduates (after five years' work).

There are different types of employment for instance, freelance consultants, government sector and private companies.

First of all, the employes of freelance consultants are getteing normal salaries after five years around they are 40% more salaries from the first day.

Second of all, the people of government sector are getting enough salaries from the government, right now they have 50% more salaries from day one.

Furthermore, the employes of private companies are not in good condition, because they are around 30% now.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the conventions of an academic IELTS writing task, adopting a conversational and meta-analytical tone ('In the further paragraphs we will write a report on that'). While some data points from the chart and table are mentioned, the information is disjointed, lacks a clear overall summary or overview, and makes superficial observations rather than reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons. For instance, the discussion of graduate salaries reads like disconnected sentences ('employes of freelance consultants are getteing normal salaries') without effectively synthesizing the data from the table. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organizational structure is extremely weak. The response uses erratic paragraphing, including an informal meta-commentary paragraph that disrupts the flow of a standard report. Cohesive devices are either missing, unnatural, or poorly utilized (e.g., 'First of all', 'Second of all', 'Furthermore'), and referencing is occasionally unclear. There is no clear logical progression or overall structuring of information that guides the reader through the data presented in the visual aids. The arrangement of ideas is disjointed, which significantly impedes the coherence of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include 'employes', 'getteing', and 'antrhropology'. The student attempts to use less common items related to the prompt, but these are handled with high inaccuracy, such as 'normal salaries' or describing percentages in awkward ways ('3% above from the behinder wiyh 8%'). The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a standard academic task, showing minimal flexibility or control over precise terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely restricted, relying mostly on simple, repetitive sentence structures ('There is a pie chart', 'It shows the destination...'). Attempts at more complex structures are faulty and plagued by basic grammatical errors, incorrect prepositions, and poor punctuation. Examples include 'the employes of freelance consultants are getteing normal salaries after five years around they are 40% more salaries'. Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader in discerning the intended meaning.

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