Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrates what Anthropology graduates from one institute did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Also tubular data show that the salaries of the anthropologists in work next five years.

overall,pie chart depic six different categories in which full-time working students holding almost half proportion. Whereas,table indicates three various corporate sectors and their earings the lowest number of private companies employee earning more than [redacted phone].

To begin with,only 8% student joint full-time and unknown category they were acquired study. part-time working and unemployed graduate students number almost similar it was 15% and 12%. The lowest number of students were doing to job such as part time job and postgraduate study. Lastly, the highest number of student holding 52% they were full-time workers.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, as it contains only 129 words and breaks off mid-sentence. While the student attempts to cover both the pie chart and the table, the information is presented in a fragmented and incomplete manner. The overview is poorly articulated, and the final paragraph is cut off before any meaningful description of the salary data can be provided. Key features are partially mentioned, but data reporting is inaccurate in places (e.g., confusing percentages with categories). Due to the incomplete nature of the response and failure to satisfy the word count requirement, the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response shows an attempt at paragraphing, but the structure breaks down completely towards the end where the text trails off unfinished. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic (e.g., 'To begin with', 'Lastly'). There is a lack of logical progression between the ideas, and sentences often feel disconnected. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the relationship between the chart data and the table data becomes confused. Paragraphing is poorly executed due to the abrupt ending and very short, disjointed sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and form (e.g., 'tubular data', 'earings', 'employee', 'joint' instead of 'joined'). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'anthropologists' and 'graduate', but accuracy is low. Spelling and morphological errors ('depic', 'earings') are noticeable and occasionally impede understanding. The range of vocabulary is strictly limited and inadequate for a fully developed academic task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent, basic errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence structure (e.g., missing articles, incorrect verb forms like 'started' instead of 'stated', and fragments). The range of grammatical structures is severely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent structural breakdowns. Punctuation is faulty, as seen in missing spaces after commas and periods. Communication is hindered by these persistent errors, and the final sentence is incomplete.

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