Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given charts illustrates data regarding Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the given table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Overall, it is clear that the highest proportion full-time work from pie chart. In contrast, the lowest percentage postgrad study . Salaries of Antrhropology graduates highest figure government sectoe while, the lowest number private companies.

According to the pie chart, the highest proportion full-time work was 52%. The second higher number part-time work which is 15%. Unemployed accounted for 12%. Full-time postgrad study and not known perecntage remained study was 8%. The lowest figure postgrad study just 5%.

One the other hand, Slaries of Antrhropology graduates after five years work. the highes amount of salaries government sector 50% types of employment $100,000+ while the type of employment $75,000-99,999 was 30% whereas, the lowest figure type of employment $25,000-49,999 government and freelance consultants remained seady 5%. Private companies highest value 335% lowest figure 10%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover both the chart and the table, noting key features such as the highest proportion of graduates entering full-time work at 52% and highlighting government sector salaries. However, the overview is extremely fragmented and lacks full development. Furthermore, there are several inaccuracies and garbled figures in the reporting of the data, such as writing '335%' for private companies and omitting key contextual descriptions. The relationship between categories is sometimes difficult to follow due to poor phrasing. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to provide a clearer, more cohesive overview of the main trends and ensure all reported data points accurately reflect the visual prompts without mechanical misreadings.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is structured into short paragraphs, attempting to separate the pie chart and the table. However, the organisation is severely disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, as seen in awkward transitions like 'One the other hand, Slaries of Antrhropology graduates after five years work.' Sentences are often disjointed fragments rather than complete logical units, making progression difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within sentences and paragraphs breaks down frequently, resulting in an unclear overall arrangement that impedes smooth reading.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on terms directly copied from the prompt such as 'Anthropology graduates' and 'government sector'. There are numerous spelling errors ('illustrates', 'Antrhropology', 'sectoe', 'perecntage', 'seady') and severe word-choice or transcription errors (e.g., '335%'). The student struggles to form correct collocations or use less common lexical items accurately. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic topic references, the frequency of errors and limited range restrict the score to this band level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains major structural flaws, such as missing verbs in introductory clauses ('The given charts illustrates data regarding Anthropology graduates... did after finishing...') and sentence fragments ('In contrast, the lowest percentage postgrad study .'). Punctuation and capitalisation are erratic, and complex sentence structures are attempted with high rates of error. Simple sentences also contain basic errors. The high frequency of grammatical mistakes causes noticeable difficulty for the reader and means that error-free sentences are rare.

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