Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the pie chart show the selaries of those who were employed after five year.overall full time employment was by far the most common destination ,whereas only a small proportion combined part time work with postgrate student. accoding to the chart 52% of graduatates enter full time work making this large cetegooy a further 15% work part time whil 12% unemployed. meanwhile 8% had destinations tat were not work.te smallest proprotion at 5%.

government sector higest salary 1000,000+ btween employment of the freelance and private .the loest selary [redacted phone] freeelances or government employment.private company highiest pay74,999 to worker.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response significantly falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 97 words. Due to this severe under-length, the development of ideas is heavily restricted, and the response cannot fully address all parts of the task. While the student attempts to mention the most common destination (full-time work at 52%) and touches upon salaries, the data reporting is disjointed, incomplete, and difficult to follow. Several figures and categories are garbled or misinterpreted, such as 'government sector higest salary 1000,000+' and the incomplete sentence structures regarding freelancing and private companies. Consequently, Task Achievement is severely limited by both word count and inaccurate data reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response lacks basic paragraphing, consisting of two poorly structured blocks of text that merge disparate data points from both the chart and the table without clear transitions. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Phrases like 'meanwhile 8% had destinations tat were not work.te smallest proprotion at 5%' demonstrate a breakdown in logical progression and sentence boundaries. There is no clear organizational structure guiding the reader through the overview, main features, and comparisons, resulting in a confusing presentation of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. There are numerous severe spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'selaries' for salaries, 'postgrate' for postgraduate, 'graduatates' for graduates, 'cetegooy' for category, 'whil' for while, 'tat' for that, 'proprotion' for proportion, 'higest' for highest, and 'loest' for lowest. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for an academic task, with frequent lexical inaccuracies causing significant strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is plagued by missing punctuation, capitalization errors, sentence fragments, and severe structural omissions (e.g., 'government sector higest salary 1000,000+ btween employment of the freelance and private'). There is an absence of reliable complex structures, and even basic simple sentences are frequently constructed incorrectly. Errors occur in almost every sentence and frequently impede comprehension, reflecting a very limited control of grammar.

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