Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie and table chart compares the Anthropology graduates from one university after completing their undergraduate degree programme and the wege of the anthropologists in work after five years.
to begin with, the destination of anthropology graduates from one university from 52% graduates are working as a fulltime.the graduates who works as a part time accounts for 15%.whereas 12 % graduates was unemployed while, full time work with postgrad study was 8% similarly 8% was not known. while some graduates work as part time and post study accounts for 5% which was very least.
The salaries of anthropology graduates after 5 years work, the goverment sector employe started with very least percentage was 5% ($25,000-49,999) gradually increased and recah up the 50% ($100,000+) which was higer than the other two sector.followed by freelancer consultants started with 5% and ended with 40 %, lastly private companies anthropology graduates started with 10 % and ended up to 30 % which was least.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt, mentioning the main destinations of Anthropology graduates and outlining the salary distribution across the three sectors. However, the response suffers from significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the text states '52% graduates are working as a fulltime.the graduates who works as a part time accounts for 15%.whereas 12 % graduates was unemployed', which correctly reflects the chart, but the descriptions of the salary table are confused and difficult to follow. There is a lack of a clear overall summary or overview, and some details are imprecise or awkwardly expressed, such as 'goverment sector employe started with very least percentage was 5%'. This places the response in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the response is extremely weak. The text lacks proper paragraphing, with the entire body squeezed into erratic, run-on blocks. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience. Phrases like 'to begin with' attempt to introduce sequencing, but the logical progression of ideas breaks down quickly due to punctuation errors, missing subjects, and poor sentence boundaries (e.g., lowercase letters starting new sentences). There is no clear overall progression from the chart to the table, resulting in a confusing layout that meets the characteristics of Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies on simple terms such as 'graduates', 'working', 'started', and 'ended'. There are also direct vocabulary errors, such as misspelling 'wage' as 'wege' and 'higher' as 'higer', as well as awkward phrasing like 'very least percentage'. While the text contains enough basic vocabulary to communicate the general topic, the restricted range, frequent word-choice errors, and incorrect lexical forms prevent it from reaching a higher band, fitting comfortably into Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is marred by frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, and punctuation. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('the graduates who works'), missing auxiliary verbs ('12 % graduates was unemployed'), and run-on sentences lacking proper capitalization and periods. There is a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex or comparative sentences are consistently faulty (e.g., 'which was higer than the other two sector.followed by freelancer consultants'). These persistent, heavy errors cause constant strain for the reader, aligning with Band 4.
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