Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart below illustrate the activities of anthropologists after undergraduation degree. Aslo the table shows the salaries of anthroplogists in work after five years.
Overall, The highest number of anthropologists contributed in full time work, While the lowest ratio of anthropologist focused on part time work and postgrad study. Full time study and not known also paly a role with same percentage.
The government sectors paid maximum salaries, while private sectors stands for the lowest percentage and Freelance consultants leads for middle salareis.
The anthropologist who did full time work after undergraduation hit peak point by 52%, While part time work be a factor in by 15% and unemployed stood at 12%. The proportion of part time work and postgrad study was at 5% which was the least position.
Not known and full time postgrad study remained same at 8 % ober the time period.
In private companies and government sectors 5% anthropologist earns between 25000 to 49999, while in private companies they earn 10% which is the highest salary. In the end the government sectors they earned highest package of salary which is 50% , while freelance consultant pay 40% and private sector stands at 30% whcih is the lowest salary percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to cover both the pie chart and the table, but the response suffers from significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the statement 'private sectors stands for the lowest percentage' regarding salaries misinterprets the table where private companies actually show 30% earning over $100,000, and government sectors have 50%. Furthermore, descriptions of proportions and percentages are often confused or garbled (e.g., 'in private companies they earn 10% which is the highest salary'). While an overview is attempted, the lack of accurate reporting and misreading of the statistical data prevents the response from achieving a higher band. It adequately identifies full-time work as the highest destination category at 52%, but overall data handling is flawed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, attempting to separate different aspects of the visual data. However, progression is frequently disjointed and difficult to follow due to poor referencing and abrupt transitions, such as 'In the end the government sectors they earned highest package...'. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and punctuation errors disrupt the flow. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logical structure of the sentences within paragraphs lacks cohesion, making the progression mechanical and unclear at times.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The student uses basic and repetitive vocabulary, attempting some task-specific terms like 'anthropologists', 'freelance consultants', and 'government sectors'. However, there are numerous lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'postgrad study', 'undergraduation degree', and 'middle salareis'. Spelling errors are also present ('Aslo', 'anthroplogists', 'ober'). The range of vocabulary is limited and barely adequate to convey the intended information, frequently causing confusion for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student attempts some complex structures, but these are frequently faulty or ungrammatical. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency (e.g., 'The pie chart below illustrate', 'private sectors stands', 'they earned highest package'). Punctuation and capitalization are also poorly controlled, with random commas and capitalization within sentences (e.g., 'Overall, The highest number...'). Simple sentences dominate, and grammatical errors occur with high frequency, often causing difficulty for the reader.
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