Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates the percentage of destination of Anthropology graduates from one university. The table demonstrates the salaries of Anthropology after lustrum years in work.

From an overall analysis, it is clearly seen that more than half of students in full-time work accounted for the largest perportion, while part- time work or postgrad study represented the smallest share. Private companies recorded the highest figure , whereas other two had almost same lowest.

In the pie chart, full time work accounted for 52% of the total. full time postagrad study and not know represted 8% of the total . the perportaion of unemployment was 4% more than postgrad and not known.

In table chart, during [redacted phone]-$ 49,999, freelance consultants and g

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is severely under-length at only 121 words, failing to meet the 150-word minimum, which heavily impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, the writing cuts off mid-sentence at the end. While the student attempts an overview and references some data points from both the pie chart and the table, the information reported contains inaccuracies and confusion (for instance, stating unemployment was 4% more than postgrad, and fragmenting the salary ranges). Due to the incomplete nature of the response, significant omissions, and failure to meet the minimum word count, the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text attempts a logical structure with an introductory paragraph followed by body paragraphs, but the abrupt ending and very short paragraphs limit overall coherence. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward (e.g., 'From an overall analysis, it is clearly seen'). Paragraphing is disjointed, and the incomplete final sentence severely disrupts the flow and logical progression of ideas. Referencing and linking between the visual data and the text lack clarity and development.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'Anthropology graduates', 'full-time work', and 'freelance consultants'. However, there are notable lexical errors, awkward collocations, and misspellings (e.g., 'perportion' for proportion, 'postagrad' for postgrad, 'lustrum years'). The vocabulary is generally repetitive and limited, and the inability to complete the task prevents the demonstration of a wider lexical range. Word choice errors occur frequently enough to occasionally cause confusion for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows a very limited range of sentence structures, mostly consisting of simple statements. Attempts at complex sentences are basic and prone to errors. There are noticeable grammatical and punctuation inaccuracies throughout, such as missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and awkward phrasing. Additionally, the response ends abruptly with an incomplete sentence fragment ('During 425000-$ 49,999, freelance consultants and g'), demonstrating a complete breakdown in grammatical completion at the end.

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