Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Below chart showed what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

First with 52% dominant graduates are in 5 years have put whole mind and soul into work. giving there full time effort for 5 years.

Second ones are 15% they worked part time, to keep link to the field while doing their interest jobs.

Thirdly 12% graduates were struggling to find a job in the market, propbablly working on their skills to find better opportunity.

Forth and fifth in chart we have 8% with post graduated study, followed by not known

last but not least we have 5% each for part time wtih studying in post graduated program to keep moving towards the academic goals.

at the end of the chart there are a salaries of Anthropology graduates workign in the field for 5 years.

it showed 3 types of employment, freelance consultatns, Government secort & Private companies.

40% have above $100,000 salaries, 50% in government secot have more then $100,000 salaries, in the last private companies have gave 30% antrhopology graduates $100,000 salaries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, noting the highest percentage of graduates in full-time work (52%) and mentioning several other categories such as part-time work and post-graduate studies. However, the selection of data is erratic and includes subjective, irrelevant commentary, such as stating graduates 'have put whole mind and soul into work'. Furthermore, the summary of the salary table is inaccurate and incomplete; for instance, the writer misinterprets the 40% figures for freelance consultants and mixes up statistics across sectors. The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall trends. This performance aligns with Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is organized into disjointed, fragmented paragraphs rather than a cohesive report. Logical progression is severely hindered by informal, conversational transitions like 'First with 52%', 'Second ones are 15%', and 'at the end of the chart'. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inappropriately, leading to a choppy and difficult reading experience. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the overview, graduate destinations, and salary data. These cohesive failures and lack of structural control place this response firmly in Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and often strained by word choice errors and misspellings, such as 'propbablly', 'post graduated', 'wtih', 'workign', 'consultatns', and 'secort'. There is an over-reliance on simple phrasing ('did after finishing', 'kept link to the field') and inappropriate colloquialisms ('whole mind and soul'). While the writer attempts some less common words like 'freelance consultants' and 'government sector', the lexical control is weak and frequent errors in spelling and word formation impede communication at times. This corresponds to a Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are persistent, fundamental errors in punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency, such as 'Below chart showed', 'dominant graduates are in 5 years have put', and 'private companies have gave'. Sentences are frequently broken or structurally incomplete. These frequent and severe errors cause substantial difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4 descriptor standards.

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