Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart shows that what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate diploma course. The table chart shows the income of the anthropology in work after five years.
To begin with, destination of anthropology graduates from one university full - time work highest 52%. However, full - time postgard study decrease 47% as compare full - time work and 15% in the part - time work destination of anthropology graduates from one university. After that, unemployed down 12% .
On the other hand, the table chart shows salaries of anthropology graduates after 5 years work type of employment freelance consulants 40% increased $100,00+. Moreover, 50% peaked in the Government sector salaries of anthropology graduates . Than, in the private companies almost increased income from 10% to 30%.
Overall, the pie chart show full time work almost highest as compare to other. The table chart give information government sector between 5%and 50% in the after 5 Years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both the pie chart and the table, noting key figures such as the 52% for full-time work and the 50% peak in the government sector for salaries of $100,000+. However, the selection of data is erratic and poorly articulated. Phrases like 'full - time postgard study decrease 47% as compare full - time work' demonstrate a misinterpretation of the data and a failure to report meaningful comparisons accurately. The overview in the final paragraph is repetitive and lacks a cohesive summary of the main trends. Furthermore, some information is missing or awkwardly phrased, pulling the performance down towards the lower bands. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, warranting a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding overview, showing an attempt at paragraphing. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'To begin with', 'After that', and 'On the other hand', which do not fit the logical flow of presenting visual data. Sentences often feel disjointed and list-like rather than forming a coherent argument or description. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data points correspond to which categories. These organizational and cohesive shortcomings align with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on lifting terms directly from the prompt (e.g., 'Anthropology graduates', 'one university', 'Government sector', 'private companies'). There are numerous lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations, such as 'diploma course' instead of degree, 'income of the anthropology' instead of anthropologists' salaries, and 'freelance consulants 40% increased'. Word choice errors occasionally impede communication and obscure the intended meaning. While a minimal range of topic-related vocabulary is present, the frequent errors and lack of flexibility place this response firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are very few error-free sentences. Examples of serious grammatical faults include missing verbs ('the pie chart show that what Anthropology graduates...'), incorrect prepositions ('in the after 5 Years'), and broken sentence structures ('freelance consulants 40% increased $100,00+'). Punctuation is also erratic with random spacing around hyphens. The high frequency of errors causes significant strain for the reader and distorts meaning at times, corresponding to a Band 4.0 level.
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