Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of Anthropology graduates from a university, who did different occupation after completing their undergraduate degree and the table shows the wage of graduates after 5 years work.
Overall, full-time work is the most famous destination amomg graduates, while Government sector gave high salaries from others.
Full-time work gain great attraction of graduates with 52%, followed by the part-time job with 15% which ranked second. Not known destination and full-time postgrad study contributes almost same ratio with 8%. 12% graduates are unemployed who cannot find any job. Part-time work +postgrad study attracts most least among other proportions. Freelance consultants and Government sector are the employment having equal percent of wage in the amount ranging from $25000 to 74999, but there is slightly difference in the amount range from $75000 to $[redacted phone] which is 10%.While the private sector offers alomost double salary from the rest of two employment in between $25000 to $74000 and there is seen comparitively decrease in ratio of salary from $75000 to $[redacted phone].
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both the pie chart and the table. The overview touches upon the most popular destination and mentions the government sector salaries, although it is slightly vague. Key data points are selected and reported, such as full-time work at 52% and unemployed graduates at 12%. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward interpretations of the table data, such as claiming the private sector offers 'almost double salary' in the lower bracket when the figures actually show 10%, 35%, 25%, and 30%. Comparisons are attempted, but some details are muddled, placing the response firmly at Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text has a clear overall arrangement and attempts logical sequencing, moving from the chart to the table. However, paragraphing is weak; the entire body of the response is crammed into a single, massive paragraph after the introduction, which impacts visual and structural cohesion. Cohesive devices are used, but sometimes mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'while Government sector gave high salaries from others', 'attracts most least'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of proper paragraph breaks impedes the logical progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'proportion', 'destination', and 'consultants'. However, there are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'most famous destination amomg graduates' (instead of 'most common'), 'gain great attraction of graduates' (instead of 'attracts the most graduates'), and 'contributes almost same ratio'. There are also minor typos like 'amomg', 'alomost', and 'comparitively'. The range is sufficient to convey basic meaning, but lexical control is inconsistent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as 'who did different occupation' (missing plural/article), '5 years work' (missing apostrophe/hyphenation), and 'there is slightly difference in the amount range'. Preposition and article errors recur (e.g., 'in the amount ranging from', 'the part-time job'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the writing from reaching Band 6 consistently.
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