Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts illustrate the Anthropology graduates for an unversity after they finish undergradute degree course. before compair the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. firstly, full time work is highest in a university, while part time job is less deamticaly. part time work which recorded at 15% and 12% who they job less. however, full time postared study is some around at 8%. while, 5% of part time job and postgrad study. while people salary in government companies only 5% between $25000-$49,999.
on other hand, three type of empolyment. the most salaries of antrhropology graduates where 50% in government sectore after 5 years as same sectore and freelance consultants same percentage. moreover, 50000 to 74999 between private companies are highest then different salaries.
overall, it seems that government sectore started less but after that risenormally and they significantly increased in [redacted phone]$ before they shetly decresed around at 25%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response makes an attempt to address the prompt by mentioning some figures from the charts and table, such as the 52% for full-time work and percentages related to graduate destinations and salaries. However, the information is presented in a very confused, fragmented, and inaccurate manner. Many of the reported data points do not match the visual source accurately, such as misinterpreting the salary distribution figures and mixing up employment sectors. The overview is unclear and fails to provide a competent summary of the main trends. Ideas are extremely limited and under-developed, resulting in a minimal response that only partially engages with the core requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organisation of the text is weak and lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is haphazard, and sentences follow one another without logical sequencing or effective transitions. While basic cohesive devices such as 'firstly' and 'however' are attempted, they are used awkwardly and do not establish clear relationships between ideas. Referencing between sentences is frequently confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. The structure relies heavily on disjointed clauses rather than a coherent presentation of statistical data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'unversity', 'undergradute', 'compair', 'deamticaly', 'postared', 'shetly', and 'decresed'. There are also frequent issues with word forms, such as 'empolyment' and 'sectore'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for discussing statistical data accurately, forcing the reader to guess intended meanings due to frequent lexical inaccuracies that strain comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Grammatical structures are very limited, consisting mostly of disjointed fragments or faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, prepositions, and sentence boundaries, such as 'people salary in government companies only 5%' and 'three type of empolyment'. Punctuation is largely absent or misused. These frequent errors occur across both simple and complex structures, often distorting the intended meaning and causing significant difficulty for the reader.
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