Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Thankyou for giving me this opportunity to explain this chart, As i can see the Anthropology graduates from one university finishing their undergraduate degree course and they work in companies after 5 years so all the undergraduate studens have the percentage of their presency as now, so there are 52% of full time workers and 15% of part time worker as now after 5 years of completing the course and there ae 5% of part time worker who are doing the postgraduate study right now with their work and there are 8% also full time postgraduage students who didnt choose to work they are use to completing their further studies, 12% of unemployed also here who didnt have the work right now and at last 8% of the information which are not known and not have the details. so who are joined in the companies and earning a salaries so overall all students joins 3 type of sector, Firstly is Freelance consultants 5% have the range of salary in [redacted phone]9 dollars and 15% have the range of [redacted phone]9 dollars and 40% of students have the salary of [redacted phone]9 dollars and the last 40% have the [redacted phone]+ dollars package. Secondly Government sectors so there are the 5% of students have earning about a [redacted phone]9 dollars and 15% of students have the package of [redacted phone]9 dollars and the 30% of having the package of [redacted phone]9 dollars and the last is 50% of the students who have the package of [redacted phone]+ dollars. Thirdly Private companies sectors so there 10% of our student details who have the package of [redacted phone]9 dollars and the 35$ of who have the [redacted phone]9 dollars and 25% of who have the [redacted phone]9 dollars and the last is 30% of who have the [redacted phone]+ dollars package.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially because it relies heavily on a rigid, mechanical listing of percentages rather than selecting and reporting the main features effectively. The writer attempts to cover both the chart and the table, noting categories such as 52 percent for full-time work and outlining salary brackets across three sectors (Freelance consultants, Government sector, Private companies). However, the information is presented in a very mechanical and repetitive manner without a clear, overarching overview or well-selected comparisons. Ideas are limited and under-developed, resulting in a partial treatment of the visual data. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to provide a clear introductory overview highlighting main trends and group data logically with meaningful comparisons rather than listing every single numerical value.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation in the text, but it lacks clear overall progression and paragraphing. The entire response is written as a single, massive block of text, making it difficult to follow the shift from graduate destinations to salary data. Cohesive devices are inadequate and repetitive, heavily relying on informal conversational connectors and repetitive phrases like 'and there are' and 'and the last'. Paragraphing is absent, which disrupts the logical flow of ideas. To achieve a higher band, the writer must divide the essay into distinct, logical paragraphs (such as an introduction, an overview paragraph, a body paragraph for destinations, and a body paragraph for salaries) and use a wider variety of appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited but minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'anthropology graduates', 'undergraduate degree course', 'full-time workers', 'postgraduate studies', and 'salary', but the range is narrow and repetitive. There are noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as writing 'presency', 'studens', 'postgraduage', 'salaries' used incorrectly as a verb ('earning a salaries'), and 'Private companies sectors'. These errors sometimes cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer should build a broader range of vocabulary, avoid basic repetition, and ensure accurate word forms and collocations when discussing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of extremely long, run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions like 'and' and conversational interjections like 'As i can see'. Attempts at complex structures are faulty, and there are frequent grammatical errors including missing or incorrect articles, punctuation issues (such as starting sentences with lowercase letters in places), and poor subject-verb agreement. Examples include 'studens have the percentage of their presency', 'who didnt choose to work they are use to completing', and 'who are joined in the companies and earning a salaries'. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer needs to break long run-on sentences into shorter, grammatically sound sentences and improve control over basic verb tenses, prepositions, and sentence boundaries.

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