Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

To begin with the destination from one university and their salaries after graduation. First 52% destination full time graduates cover from one university . Part time work and full time postgrad study was 8%. Furthermore the unemployment student was cover 12% route. Part time work or postgrad study destination was 5%. The salaries of antrhopology graduates after five years of work experience Moreover, 49,999 freelance consultant earn 5% in $25.000-. Government sector earn same 5% but in private sector earn 10%. On second year freelancers was increased to 74,999 into $50.000 the 15% salaries increase in government sector was also same 15% but in private the salaries increase to 35%. Third year freelancers was much exceed to 99,999 total revenue is -$75,000 and the salaries increase to 40% in government sector salaries up to 30% in private salaries is 25%. fourth year freelancers earn $100,000 salaries excell to 40% government sector salaries exceed to 50% but in private salaries increase 5% to the last year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two visuals and include several relevant figures, such as 52% in full-time work and the 5%–15%–40%–40% salary distribution for freelance consultants. However, the response only minimally reports the main features: it gives no clear overview of the graduate destinations and does not accurately explain the salary patterns. Some figures are attached to the wrong categories or time periods—for example, “Part time work and full time postgrad study was 8%” combines two separate groups, while the table compares salary bands, not successive years. The final private-sector figure is also unclear. To improve, summarise the largest and smallest destination groups, then compare the highest and lowest salary bands across employment types using the correct categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from the pie chart to the table, signalled by “To begin with” and “Moreover,” and the response follows the visuals’ general order. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the comparisons. The opening transition, “To begin with the destination … and their salaries,” does not form a complete sentence, and the salary discussion jumps between bands and employment sectors without a clear organising pattern. “On second year,” “Third year,” and “fourth year” incorrectly suggest a timeline, making the table difficult to interpret. Use separate paragraphs for the chart and table, and group the salary figures by salary band or employment type with clear comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “destination,” “unemployment,” “government sector,” and “freelance consultant,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the data difficult to understand. Phrases such as “destination full time graduates cover,” “the unemployment student,” and “total revenue” are not suitable descriptions of these figures. “Increased” and “earn” are also repeated where the table simply reports proportions in salary bands. Spelling errors such as “antrhopology” further reduce precision. Aim for accurate reporting language such as “accounted for,” “the proportion earning,” and “the highest salary band,” and check spelling and noun forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic past-tense forms, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure relationships between the figures. For example, “Part time work and full time postgrad study was 8%” has a faulty subject–verb relationship and joins separate categories; “Government sector earn same 5%” lacks appropriate agreement and sentence structure. Several fragments, including “The salaries of antrhopology graduates after five years of work experience,” are not complete sentences. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistently handled. Build clearer simple sentences first, such as “The government sector had the largest share in the $100,000+ band, at 50%,” then practise combining comparisons with accurate clauses.

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