Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Here gave a chart to us that describes the comparison of the salaries of free consultants ,Government sector and private companiee as well as their working time.The Anthropologist that work in Government sectors have a high percentages and ultimatey a high salery as well.Similarly ,those who work as Freelance consultants have their salery range intermediate

between those of Government sector and Private companies workers. In the above, the graph has just comparred the saleries ranging 100,000 or more dollars Frohan this amont. However; the comparison of saleries ranging from 25,000 to 99,999 dollars for all type of employement varies from one another.As a resut ,it can be concludrd by considering the graph ,that Workers in Goverment sectors are more opportunized to get a high salery rank just by doing all the work regularly.Moreover

the employees of Freelaunce consultants also enjoy a good saleries because of their work and it usually costs a lot if you have an experienced job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises that the table compares salaries across three employment types and identifies government work as having the largest share in the top salary band. However, it does not adequately summarise both visuals: the graduate destinations chart is not reported at all, and most salary figures and meaningful comparisons are omitted. The claim that freelance consultants’ salaries are “intermediate” between government and private-company workers is too broad, since the distributions differ across bands; for example, private-company employees are most concentrated in the $50,000–74,999 range, while government workers lead at $100,000+. The final comments about regular work, experience and salary are unsupported by the data. A clearer overview and accurate key figures from both visuals are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic line of discussion: the response introduces salary comparisons, comments on government employment, then discusses freelance consultants and concludes with a general claim. Linking expressions such as “Similarly,” “However,” and “Moreover” show an attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the response is presented as one paragraph and does not progress through the two visuals in a clear order. References such as “In the above” and “this amount” are unclear, and the contrast introduced by “However” is difficult to follow because the salary bands are not specified accurately. Organise the answer into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using comparisons that make each point’s relationship clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The writer attempts some task-related vocabulary, including “salary range,” “Government sector,” “Freelance consultants,” and “employment,” and uses comparison language such as “intermediate between.” However, spelling errors are frequent and conspicuous, including “companiee,” “salery,” “comparred,” “employement,” and “Goverment.” Several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “ultimatey a high salary,” “more opportunized,” and “it usually costs a lot” do not express the intended data comparison clearly. Repetition of “salary” and “work” also limits precision. Use standard spellings and vocabulary suited to describing proportions and bands, such as “accounted for,” “earned,” and “salary bracket,” while avoiding claims about causes that the chart does not show.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a mixture of simple statements and longer structures, including “Similarly, those who work as Freelance consultants…” and a concluding clause beginning “As a result.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control. For example, “Here gave a chart to us that describes…” has an incorrect clause structure, while “The Anthropologist that work in Government sectors have…” contains problems with number agreement and the relative clause. The sentence beginning “In the above” also becomes hard to follow because its clauses and punctuation are not managed clearly. Some meaning can be recovered, but these recurring errors reduce clarity. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and shorter comparison sentences before combining ideas with subordinate clauses.

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