Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart displays the proportion of Anthorpology graduates from a particular university and their aspiration while the table chart compared the earnings of them.

Overall, most of the graduets wanted to work for full time whereas a least proportion of them worked part time with contineuing their postgrad study wheras they joined in three sectors of employmnet.

Looking at the asporation of graduets, the highest proportion 52% of them had a dream to work full time. A noticable numbers 15% of graduets wanted to do part time job beside their study followed by 12% of them wanted being unemployed. Moreover, 8% of total numbers wanted full time study and not known respectively. Finally a least amount showed interest in part time with post grad study.

Turning into their salaries highest numbers was

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s main destination figure—52% in full-time work—and mentions several other categories, so it shows some understanding of the visual. However, it does not adequately summarise the task as a whole: the salary table is introduced but left unfinished at “highest numbers was,” with no salary figures or comparisons reported. Some chart details are also misinterpreted as graduates’ “aspiration” or what they “wanted,” although the chart shows their destinations after graduation. The overview is incomplete and the account of the chart is limited. The response is also 17 words below the required minimum. To improve, describe actual outcomes, give a clear overview, and compare the salary distributions across the three employment types.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph beginning “Looking at the asporation of graduets.” Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help signal the order of points. However, the progression breaks down when the final paragraph starts “Turning into their salaries highest numbers was” and stops without conveying information. The overview also combines unrelated points unclearly, and the repeated focus on graduate destinations leaves the table disconnected from the rest of the report. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview, destinations, and salary comparisons, and ensure each linking phrase introduces a clear, finished point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “full time,” “part time,” “postgrad study,” and “sectors of employment.” These terms make the general subject recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “their aspiration” for actual destinations, “a dream to work,” and “wanted being unemployed.” Spelling errors—including “Anthorpology,” “graduets,” “contineuing,” and “employmnet”—are noticeable and reduce clarity. The unfinished phrase about salaries also leaves the vocabulary for describing comparisons unused. Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “were employed,” and “salary band,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, for example, “A noticable numbers 15% of graduets wanted to do part time job beside their study followed by 12% of them wanted being unemployed.” However, these structures are often faulty, and the reader has to work to understand the relationships between ideas. There are problems with articles and agreement (“A noticable numbers”), verb patterns (“wanted being unemployed”), and sentence construction in the overview. The final sentence, “Turning into their salaries highest numbers was,” is incomplete and has no clear grammatical structure. Most sentences rely on simple reporting patterns, with limited accurate control of more complex forms. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate comparisons using structures such as “while” and “whereas.”

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