Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compare show what Anthropology gradues from one unversity did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table compare the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five.

Overall, the full time work was the biggest while the part-time work + postgrad study fell conswiderably. Part-time work and unemployed both are important. The full time postdrad study and NOt know was the increasing.

The full-time work and part-time work from one university was the largest 52% various 15%. The part-time work+ postdrad study and full time postgrad study decreasing 5% and 8%. The unemployed increase 12% and while the not konw decreased 8%.

The salaries of antrhropology gradues after 5 years and type of employment $100,00+. the freelance consultants salries in $2500_ 5% and reached 40%. The government sector also 5% and reached was the largest to 50%. The private companies started was the bigest 10% but reached with the lowest 30%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main destination, full-time work at 52%, and include figures for several other categories, so the response is relevant to both visuals. However, the overview is unclear and includes unsupported trend language: these charts show a single set of destinations and salary distributions, not changes over time, so terms such as “increasing,” “decreasing,” “started” and “reached” misrepresent the data. The salary discussion also gives only a few figures and incorrectly says private-company salaries reached a lowest 30%; 30% is the share earning $100,000 or more, while the largest share is 35% in the $50,000–74,999 band. The response is 136 words, below the 150-word minimum. Add a clear overview and accurate comparisons across the salary bands.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the chart and table. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several statements are incomplete or joined unclearly, such as “The part-time work+ postdrad study and full time postgrad study decreasing 5% and 8%.” The overview also mixes categories without explaining their relationship, and repeated use of “and” and “while” does not reliably show contrast. Group related figures and use clear comparison links—for example, contrast the two largest salary bands in each employment sector—to make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “full-time work,” “postgrad study,” “unemployed,” “salaries” and “government sector.” This shows a basic range suited to describing the visuals. However, spelling errors and imprecise or repetitive wording are noticeable, including “gradues,” “unversity,” “conswiderably” and “the biggest.” Some choices also suggest trends that the visuals do not show, such as “increasing,” “decreasing” and “reached.” Use accurate terms for proportions and rankings, such as “accounted for,” “represented,” “the largest share” and “the smallest proportion.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key labels, so the reader can identify each category without effort.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to report figures in both simple statements and longer comparisons, but sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurate, which sometimes makes the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “The bar chart compare show” combines two verb forms, while “The government sector also 5% and reached was the largest to 50%” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Subject–verb agreement and tense are also problematic in “The full-time work … was the largest” and “The unemployed increase 12%.” Build reliable sentences with a subject, verb and comparison: “Full-time work was the most common destination, at 52%, compared with 15% for part-time work.” Use present tense to describe the static visuals and check agreement and punctuation.

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