Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays, in some culture, in homes and schools teachers tell them chlidren you can achieve anything if you hard work enough. This topic have both negative and positive effects on children lives. The chaild have motivate another hand chaild make unrealize expactations.

On the one hand, the more advanteges of children telling for hard working to achieve any gole in your life. firstly, the chaild gives motivation for achieve gols on life that's chaild more hard work foe achieve their gole. Secondaly the child easily face challenges and chaild not a stop in life. For example the children perform work properly and gives a good feedback and chaild give more motivation for achieve our gole and hobbies.

On the second hand, they have many disadvantages of children telling hard working for achieve any gole in your life. Firstly, the many disadvantages. The children make unrealizeable expactation and some times you donot achieve any gole in your life to children very disappointed and stressful and do not focus of next thing properly and children have loss our expectation and hobboies and some children have leave the work, school, and other jobs after this disapoints. For example the children have a in stress every time and does not fous on any things.

In conclusion, the parents have telling childrens they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. They have both advantages and disadvantages children gives motivation and increase confidence level on the other hand is children make unrealistic expectations and children every time in stress.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question and give a relevant central contrast: the message may motivate children, but it can also create unrealistic expectations and stress. However, these ideas are only briefly explained. The example about receiving good feedback does not clearly show how the message helps a child, while the disadvantages paragraph repeats disappointment and stress without developing a specific consequence. Your conclusion restates the contrast but does not add a clear, fully developed position. The response is also five words below the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the task prompt are not counted. To strengthen the response, explain each advantage and disadvantage with a clear cause-and-effect link and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the second hand,” and “In conclusion” help the reader identify the sections. However, progression within paragraphs is weak: the disadvantages paragraph begins by repeating that there are disadvantages, then moves through expectations, stress, loss of interest, and leaving work or school without clear links. Repeated use of “Firstly” and “For example” also feels mechanical, and references such as “they” and “this” are not always clear. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, explain it, and then give a directly relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “motivation,” “challenges,” “unrealistic expectations,” “disappointed,” and “stressful.” These choices make the general meaning understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “achieve any goal” and “children.” Frequent spelling errors, including “Nowdays,” “chaild,” “expactation,” and “disapoints,” make the writing harder to read. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “gives motivation for achieve goals” and “loss our expectation.” Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “encourage children to work towards their goals” and “feel discouraged when they fall short.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express cause and effect and to connect ideas, but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts at longer sentences are often difficult to follow. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout, as in “This topic have” and “the parents have telling.” Articles, plurals, and sentence construction are also frequently inaccurate; for example, “the chaild gives motivation for achieve gols” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships between ideas unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with structures such as “because,” “which means,” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement and use the infinitive correctly: “motivation to achieve goals.”

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