Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Children from different culture Believes if they strive hard enough they can achieve anything in life. However, there are some advantages and disadvantages of providing children that message.

Children thinks that do hard and get anything in some cultures, it may be the boost their courage and spend their precious time in fulfil their desires and complete their dreams.Also promote their efficiency build strong belief in their own abilities, polish their skills. It build a growth mindset to face the different circumstances.

They must believe in their own to do anything with their noble intentions and get the return.

Therefore, some disadvantages of that thinking it may caused of creates toxic guilt and ren may blame themselves entirely for failures caused by external factors. gnores systemic barriers: It overlooks socioeconomics hurdles, discrimination, and unequal access to opportunities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 137 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you identify both advantages (e.g., 'boost their courage', 'growth mindset') and disadvantages (e.g., 'toxic guilt', 'ignores systemic barriers'), these points are presented in a fragmented, list-like manner rather than being fully extended or supported with examples. The lack of depth prevents a thorough exploration of the prompt. To improve, you must expand each point into a full paragraph with clear topic sentences, supporting evidence, and logical explanations to ensure the response is sufficiently developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt to introduce the topic and separate advantages from disadvantages, the paragraphing is underdeveloped and the flow between sentences is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition 'Also promote their efficiency'. The lack of a concluding paragraph further hinders the overall progression of the argument. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, and use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. While you attempt to use some topic-specific terms like 'growth mindset' and 'systemic barriers', there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'do hard' instead of 'work hard' and 'caused of creates' which is grammatically and lexically awkward. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid repeating basic verbs. Expanding your vocabulary related to education and psychology will help you convey your arguments more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Children thinks', 'it may caused of creates') and missing articles or prepositions ('in fulfil their desires'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complex constructions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of verb tenses. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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