Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The growing influencing of different culture has sparked a various debate that children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough because it will give them confidence and achieves their destinations.There are some advantages as well as the disadvantages.
First of all,the children who are allowed to do their work independently have much more confidence as compared to those who are forced to do any work by taking help from the experience persons.Ivarious studies have shown that it will gives confidence to the children to do my work whatever they want.Moreover,they will succeeded in achieving their goals.By achieving their goals they will be able to do any work within a seconds and have self confidence to do any work without any hesitation.For example in china children's from their childhood they have given rights to their children's that they have taught them initially that all type of work is easy and choice the work which u like the most.So in the future they became expert in every fields of life.
Furthermore,there are some disadvantages like those who are not allowed to do work alone and takes help from the expert persons are unable to do any work in their future because they don not have confidence on their selves and also they do not trust to do any thing alone.However they thinks they are loosers and can not do anything.
To conclude that,if children's are allowed to do any work with full confidence then they can achieve and if they are allowed to do any work by taking help from expert they can not do their best in present as well as in future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding confidence is mentioned multiple times without significant expansion. The example provided about China is vague and lacks a clear connection to the prompt's core theme of 'achieving anything through hard work.' The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack depth and analytical rigor, resulting in a somewhat superficial treatment of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'To conclude' are used, they are often followed by sentences that do not flow naturally from the previous point. The referencing is sometimes confusing, particularly in the second paragraph where the shift between 'children' and 'they' becomes ambiguous. Paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear, cohesive flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'work', 'do', and 'confidence'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'achieves their destinations' (instead of 'achieve their goals') and 'experience persons' (instead of 'experienced people'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision, and the frequent misuse of basic terms occasionally hinders the clarity of the argument.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('it will gives', 'they thinks'), pluralization ('children's', 'loosers'), and sentence structure. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty, leading to run-on sentences or fragmented thoughts. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band score.
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