Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the essay below i will disscuss about some cultures in which children are told if they work hard with sheer will and strength then they will be able to acheive anything in this world. We will disscuss advantages and disadvantages accordingly.
We should from very small age teach children about importance of working hard in order to achieve what we strive for. Acheiving dreams are interlinked to working smartly and doing our task timely. If a child is taught these qualities then he or she will at suitable age become independent and parent will not have to worry about them wherever they will be going whether deciding about their educational prefrence or moving out of country for working job, vacations and other useful activites in life. We should teach childrens if they have any dreams or wishes in life in order to achieve them they have to work hard with dedication , focus and sheer will to attain them.
Along with teaching these good qualities, discipline and manner, we should also guide them to not waste their precious capabilites on doing bad deeds , specifically not making the life of other people worse around them and instead we should always use these qualties for good of others. We should also keep them in check during their early learning period and if they insist on doing bad we should not tolerate their bad behaviour and stop them with strictness and accordingly.
The conclusion from above is we should teach them these good qualities to acheive anthything they want with good intention and should refrain or stop them from doing bad deeds that are going to destroys their life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt but lacks depth and balance. While it mentions both advantages and disadvantages, the discussion is superficial. The advantages are framed around independence and goal-setting, but the disadvantages are not clearly linked to the prompt's specific premise—the potential psychological impact of the 'anything is possible' message. Instead, the essay shifts to a general discussion about teaching children to avoid 'bad deeds.' The position is clear, but the development of ideas is limited and repetitive, failing to fully explore the implications of the message provided in the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'we should.' Paragraphing is present, but the transitions between the advantages and the shift toward discipline are abrupt. The introduction is quite informal and lacks a clear thesis statement that outlines the essay's structure. While the reader can follow the general argument, the lack of sophisticated linking words and logical flow between sentences limits the score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'disscuss,' 'acheive,' 'prefrence,' and 'anthything.' The word choice is often simplistic, relying on basic terms like 'good qualities' and 'bad deeds.' There is little evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic language. To improve, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary related to child development and psychology, and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'parent will not have to worry'), incorrect pluralisation ('childrens'), and awkward phrasing ('wherever they will be going whether deciding about their educational prefrence'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors suggests a lack of control over more complex grammatical forms.
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