Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individual thinks that if children's are often told them that they will get success in any think if they try hard .
Children's do hard work to complete their task and many children lose their hope if they couldn't complete the task after they do hard work .
Some people thinks that in cultures children get teach to work hard for their success in future life like in studies in bussines in their marriage life or many other things in life where they can achieve success. furthermore children's also get to learns that the fruit after hard work is also sweet and they can start hard work from their young age. For example if know how to work hard he can help his mother in house chores he or her can help their father etc.
On the other hand Some how parents forget that you don't have to put pressure on their child some child get depressed for working too hard or they get sick . For example a student exams will be held after 1 month parents told that you have to work hard for and get a good percentage after that child feels pressure on him self and get depressed with the tension it will completely ruin his exams.
In conculsion teaching children in theirs upbringing age about hard work in cultures is a very beneficial thing for children's some how it is a bit dangerous for their health if they put pressure on them that they have to do that or this thing which will lead them to depression.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For instance, the discussion on advantages focuses primarily on 'hard work' without exploring the psychological benefits of resilience or goal-setting in depth. Similarly, the disadvantages are limited to 'pressure' and 'depression' without considering broader societal implications. The position is clear, but the lack of depth in supporting arguments prevents a higher score. The response covers all parts of the task, but the ideas are under-developed, which is characteristic of a Band 5.0 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Some how' is used incorrectly as a transition, and the flow between sentences is frequently disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'if know how to work hard he can help his mother', where the subject is missing. While there is an overall attempt at logical progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structure make the essay feel somewhat disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'hard work', 'success', and 'children'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'children's do hard work' (instead of 'children work hard') and 'in their marriage life' (which is contextually odd for children). Spelling errors are also present, such as 'bussines' and 'conculsion'. The student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary, but the lack of precision and the recurring errors in basic word forms significantly limit the lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('Some individual thinks', 'children's do'), pluralisation ('children's' used incorrectly as a plural), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. The majority of sentences contain errors, and the control of basic grammar is inconsistent, which aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptor.
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