Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, many parents started making their children's physically and mentally strong which is beneficial in children's life. There are many things which parents taught their children such as to complete their work on time, work hard to achieve their goals etc. It has many advantages in children's life if their parents taught them correctly.

There are many challenges faced by children's throughout their lives. As children's have to do their study everyday to get good marks in exam. There are many students which study hard to do better in their exam but their did not score very well. It make student moral down and children's decided to give up on their study. Then parents consult their children to try again and again until they don't achieve their goals and boost their moral.

There are no effects if children's told to not give up on their dream and can achieve everything in their lives. It make children's strong enough to faced any challenge which come on their life. As when they become adult they have to do job and wanted to earn money for their family and if their give up then it become difficult for their family to survive. So it the person grown strong can face anything in life. It helpful for chilfren

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both advantages and disadvantages, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. The discussion on disadvantages is particularly weak, as the essay struggles to clearly articulate the negative consequences of this message, such as the potential for unrealistic expectations or psychological pressure. The position is somewhat clear, but the lack of depth and the failure to reach the required length prevent a higher score. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure you meet the word count to allow for a full exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as the repetitive use of 'There are many' at the start of paragraphs. Referencing is frequently unclear, for example, 'It make student moral down' and 'It helpful for chilfren', which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow. The transition between the advantages and disadvantages is abrupt, and the lack of clear linking words between sentences hinders the overall coherence of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic structures to convey meaning. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'children's' used incorrectly as a plural noun (e.g., 'children's throughout their lives'), 'moral' instead of 'morale', and 'chilfren' (spelling error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with precision. To improve, you should focus on learning collocations and using more academic vocabulary, such as 'resilience', 'perseverance', or 'unrealistic expectations', rather than repeating simple phrases like 'do better' or 'try again'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many parents started', 'It make student moral down'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'their did not score'), and misuse of pronouns (e.g., 'if their give up'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty or contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that verb tenses are used consistently throughout the essay.

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