Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In some culture, children are encourage to try hard and they are adviced that they can achive anything by giving their hundred per cent.This message has two side, first is that this type of message add positivity to children but at the same time it overhide the other cercumstances for instance possibility or fisiblity.
Giving message like this to childeren can be helpfull to avare them about the benifites of positive mindset.From the early age if children learn to try hard it will definitly benifite them in future challanges. This type of message strengthen the belife of children that efferts are in out hands not the result. So children gets encourage to give full efforts without worring about the out comes. For instance children should be told that they should try hard to win any competation and should not worry about the results but they should learn some thing new from the process.
Children should gets adviced to think realistically also. Without proper planning hard work will not pay off. So just encouraging children to try hard can dettirmental if they do not understands the importance of hole process and just works hard. Children shoud be taught to set realistic goals first and then they should try. Unrealistic goals can not be achived by just trying hard. For instance we can not change science laws.
To conclude, Children should gets taught hole process to achive some thing rather then just giveing message of try hard and that can help them to achive something.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of telling children they can achieve anything. The student presents a clear position throughout the essay. The advantages are identified as building positivity, a strong mindset, and reducing anxiety about outcomes, while the disadvantages relate to ignoring feasibility and the necessity of proper planning. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on realistic goals relies on a very brief example about the laws of science. Overall, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a recognizable overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate different main ideas. However, logical progression is sometimes hindered by mechanical transitions and referencing issues, such as starting the second body paragraph abruptly with 'Giving message like this to childeren can be helpfull'. Cohesive devices are occasionally inaccurate or repetitive, and referencing is not always completely clear. This performance aligns well with the Band 5.5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student displays an adequate vocabulary range to communicate ideas regarding the prompt, using terms like 'positive mindset', 'challenges', and 'realistic goals'. However, there are frequent spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'culture' instead of 'cultures', 'achive' instead of 'achieve', 'adviced' instead of 'advised', 'fisiblity' instead of 'feasibility', 'avare' instead of 'aware', and 'dettirmental' instead of 'detrimental'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the quality of writing, placing the response at a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'From the early age if children learn to try hard it will definitly benifite them in future challanges.' However, control over grammar and punctuation is weak, with frequent errors in basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'children gets adviced'), and spelling that bleed into grammatical perception. While meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of structural and mechanical errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.