Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The topic '' it has been thought by some that advertising has extremely successful at persuading us to buy things while other people think that advertising has been common that we no longer pay attention to it". I my personal experience regarding this statement. I agree that advertising so common that we no longer pay attention to it.
Furthermore, flyer an essential part of e-commerce. Via promotion we convey a influential and vibrant expertise of various product efficiently. Publicity great alternative using a hybrid system instead of going physically for interacting with people. Promotion very prevalent that everyone pay an attention without any effort. If we made some products which are not a useful products in our city or country than we advertise this product through internet to all over the world. So the people reached us to get this product with very eassily So those who said that publicity extremely successful at presuading us to buy things are right. If we never advertising any product buy saying that we no longer pay attention to it is never on merit.
The survey conducted by an organization and results are same as my opinion because the participent is more than 100 and the survey conducting through different levels of thoughts of peoples.
To conclude that publicity is extremely well marketed us to buy things if we never advertised a product the value rate of that product less than a product who has advertised.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response suffers from a major task-related issue: it completely addresses the wrong prompt. The student writes about advertising (the topic mentioned in their opening quote) rather than answering the actual prompt about whether children can achieve anything if they try hard enough. Furthermore, the response is under-length at 242 words, failing the 250-word minimum requirement. Although the student attempts to present a position, the ideas lack relevance to the set question and remain undeveloped. Therefore, this falls under Band 4.0 as it responds to the task only minimally and tangentially.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response exhibits significant issues with cohesion and paragraphing. While the text is broken into paragraphs, the logical progression is weak and confusing. Phrases like 'Furthermore' and 'To conclude that' are used mechanically and do not accurately reflect logical connections between ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, for example, the shift from discussing flyers to surveys without clear transitions. The overall arrangement lacks a coherent progression, placing this at Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'publicity great alternative' and 'value rate of that product'. Words are often misused (e.g., 'presuading', 'participent', 'eassily'). The range is limited and inadequate for developing complex ideas clearly, occasionally straining the reader's understanding. This performance aligns with Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent, intrusive errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage, such as 'If we made some products which are not a useful products... than we advertise' and 'the survey conducting through different levels'. Simple sentences are poorly constructed, and attempts at complex structures lead to severe grammatical distortion and frequent errors that impede communication. This corresponds to Band 4.0.
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