Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

some cilivation belive and speak to thir childern about if they try work hard they can achive anything. some people ask its not good for adults but i complity agree show advantages with this idea and in thid eassy i will support my opinion with example.

Firstly, hard working is the key of seccuss ,for exaple student prepare the exmas for mainy time and ard spend the time he acheive first position.on the order hand , learner work hard to get the goal .

Second advantage is citizen spend mor time to work they do not invovol the other harmfull activites. For illustion, student achieve the goal because they focue on tir studay.

on te other hand, some pople belive try hard disadvantage beacuse tolders leave mainy actives moreover, they can not do exsercices in case the mind and body are streesed.

in conculion, some religion asked you get anything if do try ard.i strogly agree and advantages is adduls will sucessa or not incoded harmfull activites.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the prompt by attempting to discuss both advantages and disadvantages, and expresses an opinion. However, the development of ideas is severely limited due to the shortness of the text, which contains only 167 words and fails to meet the minimum requirement of 250 words. The arguments are undeveloped and repetitive, such as the mention of avoiding harmful activities. While a position is stated, the lack of elaboration and insufficient length prevent the response from achieving a higher band. According to the criteria, under-length responses must be penalised under Task Achievement. Therefore, this falls within the Band 4 descriptor for minimally addressing the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, which shows some basic organisational structure. However, overall progression is lacking, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by severe errors in linking and sentence construction, such as 'on the order hand' and 'in conculion'. Cohesive devices are either misused or inadequate, and referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of thought. While there is a loose arrangement of ideas into an introduction, body, and conclusion, the mechanical and faulty cohesion places this firmly at Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader. Examples include 'cilivation' for civilization, 'childern' for children, 'seccuss' for success, and 'tolders' for toddlers. The student attempts to use some less common words like 'achive' and 'activities', but major spelling errors such as 'ard', 'exmas', and 'streesed' demonstrate a very limited control of word formation and spelling. The lexical range is minimally adequate at best for basic communication, corresponding to a Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed and ungrammatical, such as 'some people ask its not good for adults but i complity agree show advantages with this idea'. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and clause structure. Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected. Because errors are extremely frequent and often distort meaning, the response matches the Band 4 descriptors.

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