Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed that, in some cultures the children are to always get comments such as they can achieve anyhting in their life if they try really hard.I believe there are some advantages and disadvantages of this message but I feel that disadbvantages are more that advantages.

In my country as well, I have seen the older people saying this to the younger one's that hardwork is the key for the success. Let us focus on the advantages of this message. If a child takes this message as a positive way he/she can really achieve anything in their life. They can win a race or even can score a good marks in classroom. This message can motivate the child in such a way that even if a child do not have the talent about any particular region he/she can achieve the desirable results.

For example:When I was a child my teacher used to say this line to me always in classroom. And as the result I was able to score more than I expected in my finals.

Now, let us focus on the disadvantages of this message. As every coin has two sides if the message is not taken in right spirit the child can feel stress, anxiety, pressure for achieving the good results. And if this message sticks to him/her as a habit it might be converted into obsession. In addition, if the child fails to achieve the good result it will also create a self doubt in him/ her.

In conclusion, I agree the hardwork is very important and we can achieve if we try hard but I strongly believe eve if a child fails he/she can learn from that mistake as well. So, intstead of, giving a child this message that he/she can achieve anything with hard work the message should be given as as long as he /she is happy they can enjoy it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both advantages and disadvantages and make your position clear: you believe the disadvantages are greater. The positive effect is illustrated with your experience of improved exam results, while the risks of stress, anxiety and self-doubt are relevant to the question. This gives the response a sound, task-focused foundation. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the claim that a child can achieve “anything” is supported mainly by examples of winning a race or getting good marks, and the possible “obsession” is not developed with an explanation of its consequences. Your conclusion introduces a more balanced message about learning from failure, but could connect this recommendation more explicitly to the advantages and disadvantages discussed. Further development and qualification would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “Let us focus on the advantages” and “Now, let us focus on the disadvantages” makes the direction easy to follow, and the personal example is placed appropriately within the positive-effects paragraph. At times, however, cohesion feels mechanical because the paragraphs rely on formulaic transitions rather than showing how one idea leads to the next. The reference to “every coin has two sides” is a general transition, and the final paragraph shifts to a recommendation without fully linking it back to the earlier discussion. Some references, such as “this message” and “it,” could also be made more precise. Use clearer links between claims, explanations and examples to strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “motivate,” “pressure,” “anxiety,” “obsession” and “self doubt.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the emotional effects of the message, rather than relying only on basic language. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “anyhting,” “disadbvantages,” “intstead,” and “region” where “area” or “subject” seems intended. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “a good marks,” “hardwork is the key for the success,” and “taken in right spirit.” Aim for more accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. A broader, more consistently natural range would help express distinctions between encouragement, unrealistic expectations and resilience.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If a child takes this message as a positive way…” and a contrast introduced by “even if.” The overall meaning is generally understandable, and the response includes some sentence variety. However, errors in agreement, articles, pronouns and sentence construction recur. For example, “a child do not have” should use a singular verb, while “score a good marks” has an article and plural mismatch. The opening sentence is awkwardly constructed, and the final sentence contains a difficult-to-follow structure with “as as long as.” Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly around the example and sentence boundaries. Review subject–verb agreement, article use and sentence boundaries, then edit complex sentences to ensure each clause is complete and clear.

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