Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

many individyals are moving to metropolitian cities for theit livelihood. In many countries population acrocess the villages are decreasing because many are shifting to urban areas for employeement, and better lifestyle. I believe it as consern to both cities and village.'

since in many countries urban cities are becoming mostly crowded drastically, pollution due to lack of publict transport causing serious air pollution. moreover infrastructural developmant is a major concern where many individuals not had a separate parking so, manu of them are parking them on roads. for instance in many of the urban areas there in no proper public transport, so government should take care of these infrastructural development.

moreover in countrysides population is decreasing significantly because of lack of proper oportunities in rural villages and towns.many farmers due to lack of proper water resources many of the individuals are leaving farms, furthermore there is no proper support form higher officials regrding fertilizers, seeds and minimum support prices for their crops. both people who are living in cities and towns are facing food shortages and prices for many of the vegetables are and pulses are increasing drastically. for example in a country in asia many of the vegetables are imported from other countries due to lack of labour and water resources.

in conclision, i believe it as completely as a negative development because cities are becomming overcrowded and facing many transportation and developmental issues. whereas in villages there is no proper resources for people to depent on them to survive.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration a negative development, and the conclusion restates this view. You address effects on both destinations, including overcrowding and transport or infrastructure pressures in cities, and reduced farm labour and food supply in rural areas. These are relevant reasons, with examples such as vegetables being imported in an Asian country. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: the link between parking and wider infrastructure problems is unclear, and the food-shortage example is general rather than specific. Develop each main idea with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation and a more precise example, while keeping the focus on why the overall change is negative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs discuss urban and rural effects, and a conclusion summarises your position. This gives the reader a coherent route through the argument. You also use linking expressions such as “moreover,” “for instance,” and “in conclusion.” At times, however, connections feel mechanical or unclear. The opening of the second body paragraph repeats “moreover,” and the shift from rural labour shortages to rising food prices needs a more explicit link. Some sentences also combine several points, making the progression harder to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the claim it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “overcrowded,” “public transport,” “water resources,” “fertilizers,” and “minimum support prices.” These terms help communicate the main concerns about urban growth and rural agriculture. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable, as in “metropolitian,” “employeement,” “infrastructural developmant,” and “population across the villages.” Some expressions, such as “urban cities” and “developmental issues,” are also vague or repetitive. Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and choose precise terms for the specific problem you mean. This would make your argument clearer and show more controlled vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because” and “due to,” and a contrast introduced by “whereas.” The main argument is generally understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. For example, “many farmers due to lack of proper water resources many of the individuals are leaving farms” has an unclear sentence structure, while “there is no proper resources” shows a subject–verb agreement error. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, such as the opening fragment after the first paragraph’s initial claim. Build complex sentences around one clear main clause, check agreement and articles, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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